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    Sex Tape

    Brings me nausea
    I want to vomit all the relationships
    An ugly smells surrounds me
    I am afraid of become sick
    That loud, arousing moaning
    Makes me deaf
    I am witnessing love massacre
    How ugly and horrible it looks
    When it bares the soul.

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    I'm not sure if you are a man or woman, young or old, but that really has nothing to do with it, I suppose. Your feelings here, so honest and troubling too. Someone here sent me an email which has greatly affected me. When I complained to him, his reply was, 'don't you like sex?' These things take away from something so sacred and beautiful. I hope writing your poem will help rid some of those horrible feelings.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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    Quote Originally Posted by ampoule View Post
    I'm not sure if you are a man or woman, young or old, but that really has nothing to do with it, I suppose. Your feelings here, so honest and troubling too. Someone here sent me an email which has greatly affected me. When I complained to him, his reply was, 'don't you like sex?' These things take away from something so sacred and beautiful. I hope writing your poem will help rid some of those horrible feelings.
    I have numerous platonic internet friendships with women, so many of whom have received boorish notes of the kind you mention. I've often wished they might respond in something like the following manner:
    Oh yes, I do like sex - very much! But I usually require that the man I have it with have a gram of sensitivity and the ability to carry on at least a half-way intelligent conversation.

    Aashishamaya: Good strong poem!

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    Good for you, Ashy! I got one of those once from a friend who should have known better, me being a minister. He got told off but good! Powerful poem.
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    I don't like this kind of poems. The world is filthy enough, let's leave poetry as our shelter...
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    got mixed reaction from all over..yeah i know world is filthy...that's y i always tried to find out beauty in my poems...even in this poem too. if you have an eye for beauty..you can see it

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    aashishameya, your poem tells much in only a few lines. I like the raw quality of it, and the sentiment is mine, too.

    Sad to hear, by the way, that friends here are receiving nonsense via e-mails. There is filth in the world, no doubt about it....
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
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    Yeah. It's a possibility too. Maybe i don't have an eye for beauty.
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    quick suggestion: delete the first four lines and keep the last five.

    Auntie

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    I'm with Aunt on this one.


    The world is filthy enough, let's leave poetry as our shelter...
    Haha you'll never like my poems then! *evil smile*
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    every body has his own views towards life....i like dark poems also...

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    I agree with Aunty here. Last five line is enough to convey strong message. Good job Ashy!

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