how can I find you?

[mazHur]

How can I find you?
by mazHur


how can I find you?
where should I look for you?
I wandered over valley and vale
cruised the oceans blue
flew in the sky peacock blue
searched for you in rose gardens
in deserts, prairies and snowy ranks,
in temples, mosques and churches
in the light of day
in the darkness of night
in everything under the sky
and above the earth
But you were nowhere to be found
you were there yet not anywhere
Alas, I was lost
I was no more ME!

[blazeofglory]

How can I find you?
by mazHur


how can I find you?
where should I look for you?
I wandered over valley and vale
cruised the oceans blue
flew in the sky peacock blue
searched for you in rose gardens
in deserts, prairies and snowy ranks,
in temples, mosques and churches
in the light of day
in the darkness of night
in everything under the sky
and above the earth
But you were nowhere to be found
you were there yet not anywhere
Alas, I was lost
I was no more ME!

I like this poem, but I am a bit confused here, the last line is rather hard to construe. Maybe that is what a poem is, rather implicit.
This reminds me of Sufi poems. You proved you could write good poems. There are no unnecessary intricacies as some stuff their poems with to present a kind of conceitedness or vainglory.

Here I feel that seeker and the sought, signifier and the signified are not two different entities, inseparably one and the same, integrally one.

All one seeks in another, the beloved is at the base of it, is something self contentment.

Maybe there are a thousand interpretations a good poem can have.
Overall, I present my independent comment that the poet has the amazing capacity for expression.

[mazHur]

I like this poem, but I am a bit confused here, the last line is rather hard to construe. Maybe that is what a poem is, rather implicit.
This reminds me of Sufi poems. You proved you could write good poems. There are no unnecessary intricacies as some stuff their poems with to present a kind of conceitedness or vainglory.

Here I feel that seeker and the sought, signifier and the signified are not two different entities, inseparably one and the same, integrally one.

All one seeks in another, the beloved is at the base of it, is something self contentment.

Maybe there are a thousand interpretations a good poem can have.
Overall, I present my independent comment that the poet has the amazing capacity for expression.

thanks, Glory, for your comments

your sufi heart has already comprehended the idea behind my poem, viz.

Here I feel that seeker and the sought, signifier and the signified are not two different entities, inseparably one and the same, integrally one.