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    inspired

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    i slip out the side door
    my bare feet scatter the gathering puddles
    leaving wet prints that mark my passage

    i welcome the sunbeams
    that pierce the retreating clouds

    i stand in the wet grass
    toes firmly planted in the soil
    face lifted to the sky
    arms outstretched, palms upturned
    collecting those last few drops
    that haven’t yet realized
    that the storm is over

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    "Courage is not the absence of fear but the judgment that something else is more important than fear." -- Ambrose Redmoon

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    Quote Originally Posted by CdnReader View Post
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    inspired


    i slip out the side door
    my bare feet scatter the gathering puddles
    leaving wet prints that mark my passage

    i welcome the sunbeams
    that pierce the retreating clouds

    i stand in the wet grass
    toes firmly planted in the soil
    face lifted to the sky
    arms outstretched, palms upturned
    collecting those last few drops
    that haven’t yet realized
    that the storm is over

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    cdn/06may06
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    Oh, I can just see you out there. Beautiful. It reminds me of me and my brother sneaking out into the rain on a summer's morning, everything so fresh and clean. Thanks for sharing, Cdn.
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    The one "thing" that I do miss about my old life is my quiet back yard, the secluded deck tucked under the lilac bushes where I spent most of my summer reading, and my pretty perennial gardens. I worked so hard on those gardens, and then just up and left. What was I thinking??
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    JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.

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    What a lovely memory. I especially liked the puddles. I used to love the feel of mud between my toes.

    Thanks for this Cdn.

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    Me too, Fire....me too. You're welcome!
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    i love it cdn!!...such a feelin...there's nothin like the quiet....lw

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    I absolutely love the part about the drops not knowing the storm is over.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

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    love the poem great imagery
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    Many thanks, LW, Amp, and Amanda.
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    CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
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    10/10 points. So well structured, beautiful lines, a very original way of writing about the subject (especially the ending), and then, on top of everything, the title: "Inspired". A truly inspired poem. I loved it!

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    Awww, shucks, Barbara. THANK YOU!!
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    CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
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    "arms outstretched, palms upturned
    collecting those last few drops
    that haven’t yet realized
    that the storm is over"

    where do you get such warmth! your poems are always so filled with faith,hope,optimism...and that's what I always like about your poems.and this one also contains the same elements(a great deal more than the others).loved it,cdn.

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    Exclamation

    There's something about the final lines:


    that haven’t yet realized
    that the storm is over


    that is almost hauntingly longing, CDN

    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    Thanks very much, Gothic and Pen.
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    CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
    JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.

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    I liked this poem very much, and especially the closing line.

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