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    Rusty
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    As I Fall to A Broken Life...

    The rays of the sun,
    Fall into the man,
    But it does not effect the way they act...

    I feel the world sinking deeper,
    Inside a hole, that no one knows;
    I see people walk down the street,
    Killing the next person they touch.
    I see this and I realize,
    That I need a hole to fall into.

    I can feel the weight of one thousand men,
    Crushing my spine when I speak.
    The ground is sinking where I stand.
    My eyes are bleeding from this pain.

    Then I look at you,
    You made my life complete.
    You made me hole...

    You make me feel like someone stomped on my heart with high heels.
    You make me feel like the scum on the floor, that no one washes.
    I despise you, I hate you, hate isn't even a strong word.

    I hate this world,
    And I hate the way you made it.
    I hate the way you act and I hate everything that is.

    Most of all I hate myelf,
    I wish I could be like a mockingbird,
    Who never entered this world,
    Who just made people happy.

    He never knew of the real world.

    So today,
    I fall, a little-
    Closer to the ground,
    Blinking and thinking to myself,
    Is it all worth living,
    Should I just be here?
    Should I just try to be here?
    Shall I understand her?

    Is it ever enough...

    So now I fall to the earth,
    In an unguided path,
    Like a newborn to flight.
    I fall more happy then ever,

    So I can end this world.

    Welcome to all who loves this hate and this rage,
    But beware all subtle deeds will be rewarded with pain and suffering.

    As I fall to a broken life...
    Last edited by HjusOticePlostE; 06-21-2004 at 12:52 PM.

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    Rusty
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    the word hole is suppose to be there it's irony...

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    freaky geeky emily655321's Avatar
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    No, it's a pun. But I liked it.

    Mass-ite count is now at three! Welcome.
    If you had to live with this you'd rather lie than fall.
    You think I can't fly? Well, you just watch me!

    ~The Dresden Dolls

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    Rusty
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    Anyone else what to critique my poem. I love the criticism...no really I do! :-)

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