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    release me

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    release me

    release me from the bonds
    that keep my feet stuck
    my heart chained
    my vision clouded

    i want to fly...
    sail beyond the perimeter
    of what can be imagined

    i want to surge past the horizon
    and let the sea take me away...
    i want to dance on the curve of the wind
    and breathe in the future

    do not hold me here
    when it is freedom i desire

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    Quote Originally Posted by CdnReader View Post
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    release me

    release me from the bonds
    that keep my feet stuck
    my heart chained
    my vision clouded

    i want to fly...
    sail beyond the perimeter
    of what can be imagined

    i want to surge past the horizon
    and let the sea take me away...
    i want to dance on the curve of the wind
    and breathe in the future

    do not hold me here
    when it is freedom i desire

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    cdn/25apr07
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    Much as I loved the flow of this, the impassioned wishes, I missed a hint of whether it was a human love-object that was being addressed or 'God.'

    In neither case, as well, was there anything from which one might deduce what keeps the persona imprisoned.

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    Quote Originally Posted by PrinceMyshkin View Post
    Much as I loved the flow of this, the impassioned wishes, I missed a hint of whether it was a human love-object that was being addressed or 'God.'

    In neither case, as well, was there anything from which one might deduce what keeps the persona imprisoned.
    This is an interesting comment, PM..... I'm trying to step outside my own personal knowledge of what the poem means to me, and see it from this new POV. And I'm wondering if these things NEED to be spelled out, or can they be left to the interpretation of the reader. Hmmm.....I need to think about this some more.

    Thanks!
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    No need to spell it out CdnReader. Let whoever reads it decide if it's to someone who loves you but you're not quite in the same place, or if it's God you're speaking to. It's very nice and will speak to a lot of folks who sometimes feel tied down to a lot of things and situations. I very much enjoyed it. Thank you.
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    I'm glad you liked it, Granny5. Thanks!
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    You last two lines say it all. That is what poetry is all about,

    do not hold me here
    when it is freedom i desire

    Dare to break the mold, to not let form rule you, and say what you feel!

    Pen

    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    Awww...... Thank you, Pen!
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    "Courage is not the absence of fear but the judgment that something else is more important than fear." -- Ambrose Redmoon

    CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
    JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.

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