View Poll Results: which additional poetry style would we like to play around with?

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  • sonnet

    0 0%
  • japanese tanka 5-7-5-7-7 (been around for 1300 years)

    4 80.00%
  • japanese death poem (not sure if i like the thought of this, however) (yes, i've written one??)

    1 20.00%
  • limerick

    0 0%
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Thread: Shared Poem - You Decide What Kind!

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    in a blue moon amuse's Avatar
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    Shared Poem - You Decide What Kind!

    here's background on these fab 4:
    limericks end with the same sounds: lines 1,2,5, are A and 3 and 4 are B - what we could do here is after posting yours, you provide the words to end the lines of the one - example clue/stew/harsh/marsh/chew

    sonnets are obviously hard as hell but we could have fun and maybe even turn some good ones out. personally i'd have more fun eating nails.
    maybe we could each contribute 2 lines at a time? or 7 and 7.

    death poems are sort of self-explanatory aren't they? i wrote mine one sad silly night years ago, although they're supposed to be done at ceremonial moments, (like hari kari - DON"T try at home!!) before the big bye-bye. there was a full moon that provided sentimental background, too.
    with this one we could use the format we've used for the haiku - the last person's last line and build on it. it could be simultaneously spiritual, silly, helpful (like a friend of mine lost her friend recently, and i had nothing to offer but a poem) .

    so the tanka (a.k.a. waka) was really popular into the 1500's - and i always think of my brothers' tonka trucks when i hear this word.
    "The first three lines (kami no ku) usually present an image or thought and the last two lines (shimo no ku) shift the focus to a related idea. We might see this as similar to a sonnet's "turn." - from http://web.njit.edu/~ronkowit/poetso...rch_tanka.html
    with this one we could add the last two lines, and start the first three of the next.

    here's an example by Lady Ise:
    Pillows know, they say,
    and so we slept without one.
    Why then do rumors
    like swirling pillars of dust
    rise as high as the heavens?
    Last edited by amuse; 04-15-2004 at 04:31 PM.
    shh!!!
    the air and water have been here a long time, and they are telling stories.

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    I like the idea of a tanka. (But Lady Ise's went two lines then three, by the way. ) Another idea for that is instead of starting the lines of the poem for the next person, maybe we could write one then provide the topic for the next. Like, "[my poem].......cat fur in the sun." Then you write about cat fur in the sun, and suggest another topic.
    If you had to live with this you'd rather lie than fall.
    You think I can't fly? Well, you just watch me!

    ~The Dresden Dolls

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    oops, yes they did!
    shh!!!
    the air and water have been here a long time, and they are telling stories.

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    I'm for the death poem, firstly because it's depressive , then because as far as I understand, it has no fixed form and I'm sooo against fixed metrics (obviously cos I'm too lazy to care of syllables and stuff ).
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    Oops, Koa, did you vote? You voted for tanka, not death poem, just so's you know.
    If you had to live with this you'd rather lie than fall.
    You think I can't fly? Well, you just watch me!

    ~The Dresden Dolls

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    there's always the coin toss!
    shh!!!
    the air and water have been here a long time, and they are telling stories.

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    It has to be the tanka for me. Whilst I like sonnets, they take too much time.
    Faith is believing what you know ain't so - Mark Twain

    The preachers deal with men of straw, as they are men of straw themselves - Henry David Thoreau

    The way to see faith is to shut the eye of reason - Benjamin Franklin

    The teaching of the church, theoretically astute, is a lie in practice and a compound of vulgar superstitions and sorcery - Leo Tolstoy

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    Originally posted by emily655321
    Oops, Koa, did you vote? You voted for tanka, not death poem, just so's you know.
    Did I? And most of all, did I vote? I think I didn't...cos in this poll threads I always say my opinion then forget to cast the vote... But maybe I did this time...don't remember...*will try now*
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    'bout ready to wrap this up - anyone else want to vote? we're closer and closer to the finish line...and the tanka is 3 paces ahead of the death poem, 5 seconds left, 4, 3...
    shh!!!
    the air and water have been here a long time, and they are telling stories.

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    have voted now. tanka, tanka, tanka!!
    Don't part with your illusions. When they are gone you may still exist, but you have ceased to live.
    (Mark Twain)

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    whoo! under the wire, fayefaye. Guess I'd better get back to work on that then
    If you had to live with this you'd rather lie than fall.
    You think I can't fly? Well, you just watch me!

    ~The Dresden Dolls

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    death poem death poem!

    Bah, I see my battle is lost already
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    Koa, you're on both forums right now! oh, yeah you know that
    do you want to start a death poem thread thread or just start throwing a few up here, like mud on a window?
    shh!!!
    the air and water have been here a long time, and they are telling stories.

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    Don't worry thanks, I'd end up not caring much about the death poem thread, I know how undisciplined I am...

    *picks up some mud and looks for a good place to throw it*
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    Cool A Tanka about The Universe.

    The Universe, with
    all its splendor, always seems
    to mystify me.
    The suns, stars and galaxies;
    what purpose do they all serve?
    Last edited by Uncle Lar; 04-02-2007 at 04:47 PM. Reason: Misuse of bold.

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