Hi Yashad,
I’m glad you felt comfortable enough to post another one of your poems. This is definitely a good first attempt. You have some interesting things working in this poem, especially the inner/outer deal. I saw this aspect working in your previously posted poem as well. Maybe that is the natural way you set up your poems? But did you know that the way you had set up your lines, the way it reads, can be read as almost a literal thing? What I mean is in line two, the “You” is actually in “my eyes,” which is strange, yet interesting, because it summons up an image for me that this person requires some palpable sense of this other person to be fulfilled, or comfortable, or secure. What do you think? I think this would be a great way to end your poem. A part of me still feels you are dancing around exploring the subject of your poem. I would love to know what aspect of this other person gave this person the feelings he/she yearns. The ending seems out of place for me, as if it were unneeded explanation to accompany an already telling image.
I like the title. Nice way set up the subject of romance for an examination.
Take care