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    Now the results.

    I was torn between 4 great entries. And trust me I wanted to call it a 4 way tie! But anyway, that cant be done, only one has to select the next picture and be the next judge. But still I’d like to name the top 4 entries in this one. It’s just fair since all of them were almost equally good.


    Top 4:
    Pendragon: For the ingenious subject in his poem.
    Schadenfreude: For that great contemplative tone.
    Petrarch’s Love: Whose poem was really really touching.
    Firefangled: For those exquisitely put recollections that come real.

    Well done to all of you.

    And the winner this round is Petrarch’s Love, for this great poem:

    He once owned a violin
    Which made his friends smile to hear
    And made all people smile to see him coming.
    On city corners he played
    The old tunes people love
    And Dvorak’s humoresque.
    He loved that best:
    The way the clear notes passed
    Effortless through city air heavy with smog,
    The way the joy of it was joy
    Not unacquainted with grief
    But laughing still.
    The notes he played then
    Were rich, full, satisfying
    And the people who heard were fed.
    Light delicacies of staccato
    And the hearty richness of a low legato
    Sated the nameless, unconscious hunger of their daily lives.
    When he was done they cried:
    “Encore! Again, again!”
    And so he played again
    And they stood, lips gently parted,
    Eyes closed as they savored
    The notes that held them transfixed
    The notes that poured like warm wine
    From the violin he once owned.

    Then came the day in a dirty shop
    And a quick exchange
    (Better not to dwell on loss).
    It bought enough to keep
    Body and soul whole
    For a few weeks.
    Inevitably the empty arms,
    That play the winds and sway
    To unheard music in the city air heavy with smog,
    Inevitably they wither as they play
    Unseen strings. Inevitably they weaken
    And they cannot hold
    Even what is imagined.

    Against the cold
    He keeps a thin blanket
    And a thinner dog
    The only creature glad to see him coming.
    His hair is a comic mop.
    His body odd emaciated angles
    Like the lines of a caricature,
    Like a cartoon of himself
    He has become
    Humoresque.
    He loved that best
    He hears it last.

    Silence
    Broken by the cry
    Of the magpie.
    To those harsh notes comes reply:
    “Encore! Again, again!”
    Lips gently parted.
    Hunger sated.
    An hour after these words are exhaled on a penultimate breath the thin dog leaves to find warmth.
    Congratulations, not only to the winner, but to all the great poets of Lit-Net. Cheers!
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    Internal nebulae TheFifthElement's Avatar
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    Congratulations Petrarch - it is a truly excellent poem
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    Yes, congratulations Petrarch. Very good. I look forward to the next picture. And good job Symph. It must have been tough.
    LET THERE BE LIGHT

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    Congratulation Petrarch!

    Quote Originally Posted by symphony View Post
    To ktd222:

    I don’t know if the meaning’s too obvious- but I didn’t quite relate to what you meant by using the word “exudes” in the 2nd line. Forgive me for being so stupid.
    The last stanza with the ‘heavenly connection’ was, in my opinion, brilliant. It stands in contrast to the rest of the poem and works well as a conclusion.
    I thought the first two lines were the best out of the whole poem. Maybe we have different ideas of the lyric moment.

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    Quote Originally Posted by symphony View Post
    To Virgil:

    Loved the way you started with the mechanical city life and ended up recollecting the boisterous country life. Somehow it made me think of that Toby Keith song – “Whiskey for my men, beer for my horses” . The “tuna fish cans jogging” gave me a hearty laugh.
    Yeah, that image of tuna fish cans will stay with me for a long time every time I see traffic.
    LET THERE BE LIGHT

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    Thanks, Symphony! And thanks to everyone else for your congrats, but even more for your wonderful entries. I am especially honored to be chosen in a round that had an unusually high number of really top notch poems. If everyone keeps up the way they have I shall have a truly hard time judging the coming round. O.K., I'm off to find a new pic. Will post again shortly.

    "In rime sparse il suono/ di quei sospiri ond' io nudriva 'l core/ in sul mio primo giovenile errore"~ Francesco Petrarca
    "Follies and nonsense, whims and inconsistencies do divert me, I own, and I laugh at them whenever I can."~ Jane Austen

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    in angulo cum libro Petrarch's Love's Avatar
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    Here's the next picture. I'll set the deadline for December 8th, which should give everyone plenty of time to knock my socks off with their entries. Happy writing!

    Last edited by Petrarch's Love; 11-03-2007 at 12:15 PM.

    "In rime sparse il suono/ di quei sospiri ond' io nudriva 'l core/ in sul mio primo giovenile errore"~ Francesco Petrarca
    "Follies and nonsense, whims and inconsistencies do divert me, I own, and I laugh at them whenever I can."~ Jane Austen

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    Congratularions, PL. I loved all the poems, but yours touched me the most.

    Symphony, kudos to you for such a tough decision.

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    Congratulations, Petrarch's Love!

    Oh, what a painting to choose...
    se non e vero, e molto ben'trovato

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    Congradulations are in order, I think, Petra!

    And thanks to Sy for my making the final four. You had a tough choice, and talent runs high around LitNet these days!

    I'll think on this one for a while, Petra. Getting in the first poem just gives a mark for someone else to shoot at!
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    You had a tough choice, and talent runs high around LitNet these days!
    Couldnt agree more!
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    Well deserved Petrarch.

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    What the heck, Petra. They won't fire without a target. Might as well be that target.

    Vermeer’s The Milkmaid

    She has not had a life that’s been easy,
    See how the work has leant strength to that arm.
    Her features are strong but perhaps not really pretty,
    Still she hasn’t lost all of her womanly charm.
    See how carefully she pays attention to detail,
    Pouring milk from the pitcher to go with the bread.
    These days milk provides both drink and something to sell,
    If she earns no money, how will she and her mother be feed?
    She places the things on the tray for her Master and Mistress,
    Time for breakfast is swiftly drawing nigh.
    She double-checks the coins in the pocket of her dress,
    For Master will want the money for the milk sold to Bligh
    The tinkle of the bell calls her and she picks up the loaded tray:
    The household has awakened and she curtsies “Good Day!”

    Dale Harris
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    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    Thanks Pen! Great entry, and clearly people need the benefit of your prolific example to motivate them to pick up their pens. O.K. folks, we've got our first wonderful entry and I'm looking to see more just as good follow.

    "In rime sparse il suono/ di quei sospiri ond' io nudriva 'l core/ in sul mio primo giovenile errore"~ Francesco Petrarca
    "Follies and nonsense, whims and inconsistencies do divert me, I own, and I laugh at them whenever I can."~ Jane Austen

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    Pen...beautiful. I love the way you paint with words.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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