Form Poem Contest

[Dark Muse]

Three very good entries. I enjoyed them all, they each took very different approaches to the form.

Pendragon: Really enjoyed the reversal of the first line and I loved the mirror effect of the poem.

YesNo: I enjoyed the way in which you used that classical theme of the good and bad conscious. I could visualize the angel on one shoulder and the devil on the other having this debate.

tailor STATELY: I loved the nature theme, and thought this was beautiful and elegantly written, also a very poetic title.

And the winner is

tailor STATELY

[Pendragon]

Congrats, tailor STATELY! And thanks for the comment Dark Muse!

[tailor STATELY]

Thank you Dark Muse ! I enjoyed the other entries as well.

Next: English style Ottava rima (Sailing to Byzantium, by William Butler Yeats an example... http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/172063 )

Eight 10-syllable lines per stanza w/ a scheme: ABABABCC

1-stanza ok; extra points for multiple stanzas (maximum of 4-stanzas).

Create !

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[Pendragon]

Dirge #79

I do not know why that I ever felt
The habits of decades would ever change
Given that my people still clearly held
The strong opinion I am very strange
Thought mom dying might make their cold hearts melt
But I am still filled with red hot rage
They know that my only sin was getting sick
So why did they play such a vile, cold trick?

I know too well that they were always cold
They even hated me when I was well
Down through all my life, through long years untold
They basically put me through holy hell
I should stand up with courage, brave and bold
And simply tell them all to go to hell
Since they put me high on their to hate shelf
I should tell them all to go screw themselves

Why do I still care; obviously they do not?!
Bitterness is not really me at all
Wishing them all in a damp grave to rot
Blood is thicker than water and through it all
My family is really all that I got
Forgiveness: for is not that the whole law?
I curse in darkness, but smile when in light
Always tell myself that it is alright

A tangled web of lies, told as the truth
Cold comfort comes from their icy blue eyes
Always hated since I was but a youth
So I hid my heart in a thin disguise
Hatred is illogical, so now forsooth
I will endure until life itself dies
Nestled safely away in my own tomb
Bad-a-Bad-a-boom! Best guy in the room!

Pendragon
12/18/2015

[YesNo]

The wind is blowing off my morning smile.
The crowd requires a detour from my plan.
Impatience puts my sinking love on trial.
The beach is closed with new construction. Can
The simple joy of everything breathe while
The sidewalk holds asleep a ragged man?
That beggar may perhaps be more aware
Than I who miss his feet and pass him there.

[tailor STATELY]

Two strong entries. Time to set a deadline. Let's try for 1-week from today 1/14/2016 midnight Pacific Standard Time.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[tailor STATELY]

Deadline: 1 Day & ~9 hours to go ! ( 1/14/2016 midnight Pacific Standard Time. )

[tailor STATELY]

Enjoyed both entries.

Pendragon: Forsooth ? ( yeeesh ! ) - though it does add to your wry/tortured tone and ending. Enduring to the end is one of my credos. Favorite line(s): "Nestled safely away in my own tomb" "Bad-a-Bad-a-boom! Best guy in the room!"

YesNo: Enjoyed the enjambment in L4. Favorite line: "The wind is blowing off my morning smile."

Passing the torch to Pendragon. Congratulations !

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[Pendragon]

Thank you!

I am going to choose song. Two verses and a chorus. Your choice of how the rhymes go, but it must have rhyme. The rhyme of the first verse should match the rhyme of the second verse, i.e. If first verse goes ABAB, so does the second. The chorus doesn't have to match rhyme with the verses.

So it's this way

First Verse
Chorus
Second verse
(additional verses if wanted)

Good luck!

God Bless
Pen

[Pendragon]

You know, I'm gonna pass on this. No one has been here to even try this form. I'm gone.

[YesNo]

Don't leave yet! I trying to think of a subject for a song. I like the song form just haven't come up with anything that fits.

[tailor STATELY]

I been ! I been ! Queued up on ZenPen.io to noodle with on http://www.rhymedesk.com . My ideas just take longer from germination to harvest than all y'all.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[YesNo]

Shadows from the past
Confront the spinning mind
Far off dream clouds last
Though they’re hard to find.

Regret moves in too quickly.
Forget and close the door.
Blinding fog flows thickly.
Forgive it now once more.

Whenever sadness chokes the heart
There’s light somewhere to soothe it.
A wrinkle in your mind might start.
Relax and you can smooth it.

Brains don’t understand.
Since they don’t really know.
Demons may be right at hand
But they can’t see the show.

Whenever sadness chokes the heart
There’s light somewhere to soothe it.
A wrinkle in your mind might start.
Relax and you can smooth it.

[Pendragon]

Hummmm..... you realize I will be attempting to sing these....