A member of this literary community suggested that I post this poem to recieve opinions from other people of the forum. The objective of this poem is to be written shortly and rhythmically so that the words practically roll off your tongue while reading it. All comments, opinions, thoughts.. will be respected. Thanks.
Onto the sea
I sailed my boat
And prayed that it
Would stay afloat
From dawn til dusk
From dusk til dawn
In search of love
I drifted on
What happened then
I don't recall
I think it was
A sudden squall
For when I awoke
I thought I died
At the sight of an angel
At my side
But lucky for me
That was not true
For I found love
And love was you.