so umm here is chapter one. I am sorry I was really anxious to have people read it, so I only decided to proof read like the first 3 pages. I know Im a horrible slacker, but guess what! Chapter 2 is like about half way done, I think! Actually its pretty much done, so if you like it, I need you to do two things: 1). Comment(this you might want to do even if you do not like it ) and 2). Wait for chapter 2 and comment then.