Drip Dry
I think if I would see you today
I would fall in a heap to the floor, weeping,
and you could stick a stick in me,
and mop the floor.
No need for rinsing or wringing.
Just put me in some dark closet for another day.
amp, August TwentyNinth TwoThousandSeven
I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.
"If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor
I understand this completely, but there will be better days. Nicely done Amp.Originally Posted by ampoule
"Some go to church and think about fishing, others go fishing and think about God." -Tony Blake
Wow, Amp! This is one powerful little collection of important words. I understand and empathize with the depth of this.
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"Courage is not the absence of fear but the judgment that something else is more important than fear." -- Ambrose Redmoon
CR: Madame Bovary, by Gustave Flaubert
JF: Pride and Prejudice, by Jane Austen. My review is here.
YES! to what Poppy and Cdn both said! How pure is the ache in this! I think the title might be a touch flippant - or too playful? - for something so strong and sincere.
I don't know, Amp, I like the title. Anyone who's ever had a complete emotional breakdown and cried what people call, by paradox, (a really good cry), knows the drip, drip of tears to the floor until you drip dry. Great title, great poem.
Pen
Some of us laugh
Some of us cry
Some of us smoke
Some of us lie
But it's all just the way
that we cope with our lives...
This is an excellent poem Ampoule. Who could stick a stick in you?
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I like it too Amp. Such a visual image in sticking a stick. Very imaginative. I kind of agree with Pen in the logic of it: how do you dry something if you're crying? But really good though.
LET THERE BE LIGHT
"Love follows knowledge." – St. Catherine of Siena
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Wasn't there a thread at one point about "Really Vexing Household Issues," of which an example was the age-old question: How could one sop up the moisture of a wet floor with a mop that was already somewhat damp.
Good point Prince, maybe you're right. I do like the poem and i'm not sure i would change anything.
LET THERE BE LIGHT
"Love follows knowledge." – St. Catherine of Siena
My literature blog: http://ashesfromburntroses.blogspot.com/
wow, i'm happy i stumbled across this, its short, but say so much in those lines, uses very powerful words
"You may win some, you may lose some, but you'll never be there again"
Very emotional one Amp ! imaginative too...Nicely written.
a nice ditty !
Oh God. This is very powerful, yes. I love the image. The last line tells a lot.
This poem is perfect. You just blow me over with these high level emotional but brief punches. I love the way the poem sounds, the way it looks and the way you express yourself. And I agree with Virgil, "stick a stick" is a powerful sound in this poem. Kudos, Amp!
Bravo !I must say Amp has written a classical poem this time,,,,,,,,a perfect classic poem in all respect.
Congrats Amp
MazHur
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