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    Caught up, in a poem

    Sort of odd posting a poem a week, but seeing my other thread near the top, but threads enjoy survival.

    This is basically me wanting to not think, to not be as smart as I am. To lose myself so that I can find myself. Because art is the only thing that brings me closer to that, I seek out that, rather than things which only cloud me and lose more of myself, by other people, other things, education of that which I do not need. I'll just let the poem go on...

    Caught Up

    Just stare, and think of today;
    feel your throat dry up in decay.
    Swallow your disgust and anger,
    repress it into your mind for release;
    trapped in your skull only dragging you down.

    Heated in darkness, you seek ignorance,
    never possible with your intelligence.
    Kept to the thoughts, and lost in yourself,
    forgetting the person who you once were,
    becoming that which you merely observe.

    Glance back to spot the social associates,
    discussing life with someone who doesn't have one.
    From the outside looking in,
    burning away in a desert hour glass;
    forgetting and never forgiving,
    the ways my thoughts seem to never pass.

    Caught in my skin, and fighting free;
    looking for tension released, from this mind I don't see.
    Not even wanting to think, only to be,
    to create enough of my mind,
    to finally find me.
    To think is to blog is to distract is to stop is to destroy is to die is to think therefore I am not good enough

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    "to create enough of my mind
    To finally find me."

    I liked the whole poem and I'd die to have been the one who wrote hose last two lines.
    I'm nobody, who are you?
    Are you nobody too?
    There's a pair of us, don't tell!
    They'd banish us, you know!

    How dreary to be somebody!

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    Heh, thanks.. Why the last two? You just liked them ... or what?

    I sorta felt it could've ended better.
    To think is to blog is to distract is to stop is to destroy is to die is to think therefore I am not good enough

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    I SAID I liked the whole poem. But yes- especially, I liked those o lines and I can't think of a bettr ending - unless of course you come up with one and post it!
    I'm nobody, who are you?
    Are you nobody too?
    There's a pair of us, don't tell!
    They'd banish us, you know!

    How dreary to be somebody!

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    I enjoyed this and also want to bump back onto first page of topics.

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    heh, Thank you very much. *must..bump*
    To think is to blog is to distract is to stop is to destroy is to die is to think therefore I am not good enough

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