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    Hiss and leaves dying
    At the Season's edge of a
    Paternal razor

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    Ever Benevolent and Wise
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    Paternal razor
    aggression and recession
    she searches for peace

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    Wow...I've seen den 'advertising' this thread in other threads, and I thought "wow, interesting"... But by the time I got to read this, I had seen do many posts about this that I didn't even want to see it for spirit of contraddiction...(here I am infact, I even contraddict myself... it must be some kind of art).

    And in any case I've never managed to do an haiku, I hate to have to count syllables... And noone ever taught me how the hell to count syllables in English... Oh no, I was taught last year, but I didn't really understand (shameful for a student of English I know)... Only free verse for me please

    Am I interrupting the creative game? I apologise.
    dead on the inside, i've got nothing to prove
    keep me alive and give me something to lose

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    she searches for peace
    it gently disturbs her soul
    comfort from the saved.

    (religious, I know )
    Hwt! We Gar-Dena in geardagum,/eodcuninga rum gefrunon,/hu a elingas ellen fremedon!
    Oft Scyld Scefing sceaena reatum,/ monegum mgum, meodosetla ofteah,/ egsode eorlas, syan rest wear/ feasceaft funden; he s frofre gebad,/ weox under wolcnum, weormyndum ah,/ ot him ghwylc ara ymbsittendra/ofer hronrade hyran scolde,/gomban gyldan. t ws god cyning!

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    she searches for peace
    that calms the tree of her mind
    lashed by raving wind

    postscriptum:

    I am afraid that the time difference between Europe and the States excluded me from yesterday's poetical inpulse on this forum. Perhaps we can make rules that enable us to be equally involved in this Haiku game.

    postpostscriptum:

    Koa: is not very hard to count syllables in English. Just pronounce the words you write, and use your feeling for the English language. If this is to hard for you, you can also transcribe it to the International Phonetic Alphabet - if you have had linguistics. At the moment I am making a metrical translation of Ovidius Metamorphoses (liber III, Narcissus, Echo, Tiresias) in Iambic Pentameters, so let me give you an example (III, 316):

    'While this on earth was done by fatefull law'

    can be written like:

    'Whyl dis on urth was don by f(ae)tfull law'

    Which has exactly 10 syllables, this time even iambically ordened. Every syllable is built around one vowel, and can have 'an onset' and a 'coda', consisting of consonants. Some 'vowels' that are in a certain word are not pronounced, or melt together with other phonemes in the text. Just like in Italian:

    'Quali fioretti dal notturno gelo'

    'Kvvali fjoretti dal notturno gelo'

    counts eleven syllables - the Qu combination in Italian forms a consonant, so that the vowel u is not pronounced like in the two syllable word 'Uve'. (It is quite easy to count the syllable's in Dante's Comedia, isn't it?)

    I hope - koa - that you did not miss the allusions to your Italian poem that I once read.

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    Shea pretty well anything goes here that's the beauty of it! And I wouldn't necessarily call what you wrote `religious' ... The themes of `peace , soul, comfort, saved' are more subjective and spiritual to me, rather than dogmatic.

    Koa, aw, that's too bad, maybe somebody here can advise you in very simple terms on how to count syllables, but I'm afraid it could be confusing. You write well in english, do you speak it much too? Actually, hang on, when you look in a dictionary, they sometimes break the word down into syllables, for instance from

    http://dictionary.reference.com/

    syllable n.

    A unit of spoken language consisting of a single uninterrupted sound formed by a vowel, diphthong, or syllabic consonant alone, or by any of these sounds preceded, followed, or surrounded by one or more consonants.

    One or more letters or phonetic symbols written or printed to approximate a spoken syllable.


    So .". `syllable' as written above with the hyphens has three syllables. Maybe that will help a bit.



    comfort from the saved
    rest my tired head calmly
    embrace me my friend

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    embrace me my friend
    put your arms around my neck
    but don't do it twice

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    but don't do it twice
    can only handle so much
    addiction rents hearts

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    addiction rents hearts
    of hidious old scholars
    to children's young mouths

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    to children's young mouths
    cooked broccoli tastes awful
    but I love it raw

    :P

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    but I love it raw
    'cause I'm a cute red bunny
    frying in your pan

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    bunny? red? :P

    frying in your pan
    sweetbreads port wine and garlic
    decadence spurs life

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    decadence spurs life
    as the old feasting Romans
    shouted to their slaves

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    shouted to their slaves
    plantation owners evil
    devil incarnate

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    devil incarnate
    Beelzebub, Lucifer
    became friends for life

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