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    Post The Perfect Day

    Don't think i'm too carzy writing this...



    I feel the wind
    as it makes its way
    i feel the sun
    because it's a really hot day
    i feel the rain
    as it pounds the hard ground
    i try to look up
    but it forces me back down
    i feel the rough ground
    under my bare feet
    i looked down
    and see the raging waves
    the blue and gray clashing together
    the sharp rocks
    creating mini tidal waves
    i see a seagull
    swiftly move above the water
    as it picks up it's dinner in one quick move
    i watch the lightning
    making it's way to the ground
    i hear the thunder
    i suddenly turn around
    i see my parents,
    and their tear streaked faces,
    running to wards me with incredible speed
    i close my eyes
    and start to fall back wards
    as i reopen my eyes
    i see my mom
    on her knees
    praying to me or the sun
    i hit the rocks
    with such great force
    the last thing i heard
    was my mother's scream
    oh... what a perfect day...
    for a suicide

    Thanks for reading!!! Please Comment Thanks!!!
    ~Stevie~
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    Stevie, Just so you know suicide won't satisfy. You mention it, what I would call frequently. If you are ever in a blue mood PM me. I've been through some wicked mean depressions.
    "I am glad to learn my friend that you had not yet submitted yourself to any of the mouldy laws of Literature."
    -John Muir


    "My candle burns at both ends; It will not last the night; But ah, my foes, and oh, my friends - It gives a lovely light"
    -Edna St. Vincent Millay

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    Me too! My parents think i'm insane!~
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    Part of the struggle of creativity is your uniqueness. You obviously have a creative mind. You may want to watch out for strong mood swings though. Usually you can ride them out.
    "I am glad to learn my friend that you had not yet submitted yourself to any of the mouldy laws of Literature."
    -John Muir


    "My candle burns at both ends; It will not last the night; But ah, my foes, and oh, my friends - It gives a lovely light"
    -Edna St. Vincent Millay

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    Read my link 2 poems and quotes. I'm gonna thread a really disgusting 1
    i'll PM it 2 u 1st
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    Steve

    we really don't like to `censor' poetry here, or any other creative works, but, I'm going to ask you to consider getting some support and help with the recent issues you've written and posted about.

    Most people are here at this forum for their interest in literature. With the nature of this and other poems you've posted, it's quite possible that you may trigger or upset someone, and we are not equipped or capable of helping you in what may be where you need real life assistance in regards to depression or suicide or self-harm.

    There are numbers you or anyone can call if you are feeling upset and need someone to talk to:

    United States:

    National Suicide Hotline: 1-800-SUICIDE (1-800-784-2433)

    Suicide Prevention Hot Line:1-800-827-7571

    Canada:

    Kid's Help Phone: 1.800.668.6868

    a website with many other phone numbers and resources:

    http://www.teenadviceonline.org/gethelp/numbers.html

    a discussion forum for depression, self-harm and other issues:

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    Want me 2 block this one too????
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