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    Go-Go

    I imagine
    you think you look silly
    dancing around naked
    in the living room like that,
    doing the
    shake- shake-shake
    to make me smile
    It isnīt just men that lose their
    breath you know,
    and I wish I could tell you
    what I want to do
    without sounding like
    pornography,
    but then again
    maybe you wouldnīt mind.


    (long time, nothing written. Glad to be back on the poetry page)
    "Man was made for joy and woe;
    And when this we rightly know
    Through the world we safely go" Blake

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    How pleasant to see you back in this edge of the forum, Isagel!
    The line-breaks (caesuras) seem in the perfect places, especially the "doing the" from the "shake-shake-shake." With each line, it flows beautifully, almost like beat poetry with light music in the background.
    Otherwise, I must admit, the poem made me laugh aloud to where my housemates and cats looked strangely at me.

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    Now that would be telling it, wouldnt it?
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    you know what I lik best Isagel its that it is such a happy poem and full of life even the what do you call it the sound of it without the words just ace!!!
    Ps I hope its not too long before you write somthing else)
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    nice

    Nice poem Isagel!

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    Thank you all very much.

    Iīm not very used to write humorous things, but I liked doing it - so Iīm very glad you found it funny! Mono and Nightshade - it was very nice to hear that you liked the rythm.
    "Man was made for joy and woe;
    And when this we rightly know
    Through the world we safely go" Blake

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    Smile

    how vibrant, and how lucky you are!

    what an appreciative, humorous, and freshly seductive poem.
    shh!!!
    the air and water have been here a long time, and they are telling stories.

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    Indeed, I am very lucky.
    And your comments are very much appreciated. They are as generous and thoughtfully expressed as ever. I only wish I could comment poetry like you do it.
    "Man was made for joy and woe;
    And when this we rightly know
    Through the world we safely go" Blake

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