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    Quote Originally Posted by Pensive
    I think that "mist" and "bliss" do not seem to rhyme together much but overall it is pretty good.

    Why would you think that?

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    Oh, now, my opinion about "bliss" and "mist" does not matter because Night said that it was not meant to be a rhyme.
    I sang of leaves, of leaves of gold, and leaves of gold there grew.

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    Not decided yet

    Got annoyed at how long its been so I was messing. And trying to train my speech recognition program.

    Im probably going to call it something like The freedom of nonexsistance or something along those lines, any ideas??

    Also is sheep's a word? my super spell checker isnt liking it.
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    We were born of sheep's dreams,
    we were born of grass.
    Neither of us is quite there
    we are nought but dreams and gas.

    So it hardly matters that I've killed you,
    Chopped you up for stew and pie.
    Because you my dear don't exist
    Nor in point of fact do I.

    Cackle! Hiss! Bubble and boil!
    Umdiddle dee and umdiddle DIE!

    We are characters in someone's brain
    though I am not quite certain who.
    But all that matters is-
    It doesn't matter what I do!

    Kill or steal, rob or lie,
    if I don't exist can I die?

    Tell yourself that you are real,
    you will find that you are not
    For we are all but fairy tales
    From that green sheep that dreams a lot.
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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    Nightie i love it! its so nonsensical and surreal, cunning and clever! very witty! This is going into the favourite poems by fellow litnetters for sure!
    Wish i could write poems like that. Mine are all depressing....
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    "Come away O human child!To the waters of the wild, With a faery hand in hand, For the worlds more full of weeping than you can understand."
    W.B.Yeats

    "If it looks like a Dwarf and smells like a Dwarf, then it's probably a Dwarf (or a latrine wearing dungarees)"
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    Huh really ? I dont like it very much at the moment probably because I spent 2 hours fighting with my computer to get it accept it dicated.... and still didnt like most of my words.

    So do you have a title idea? Im really quite stuck with this one.
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    i'm not sure.... What about An imaginary reality. Sounds a bit paradoxal.
    "Come away O human child!To the waters of the wild, With a faery hand in hand, For the worlds more full of weeping than you can understand."
    W.B.Yeats

    "If it looks like a Dwarf and smells like a Dwarf, then it's probably a Dwarf (or a latrine wearing dungarees)"
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    There is only one person to blame

    Swimming through custard
    Life what drag

    Sticky sickly sweetness
    Sucks me into its depths,
    was that a fly that just whizzed by?

    Cold gel fills my lungs
    I cant breathe, tired now
    Where has ambition gone?
    Drive , hope, enthusiasm?

    Instead I am mired in this pseudo
    Reality trapped by my laziness
    I’m warped and who is there to blame?

    No one,
    No one but myself.
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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    Wow, Night!

    I write poems personifying the Night and you write a wonder personifiying the morning! They should have been back to back! Well done poem!

    Then Silence speaks and Dreams awken and so on! When did you become such a wonderful poet? Where have you been hiding your talent? You shine brightly!
    Some of us laugh
    Some of us cry
    Some of us smoke
    Some of us lie
    But it's all just the way
    that we cope with our lives...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Nightshade View Post
    Like the sunset of a winters day
    happy thoughts come and fade a way
    And all that is, is cold and grey.

    To escape from the drudgery, a hamsters wheel
    To know this is not fate and set with seal
    One must learn to see, to hear, to feel.

    To find the answer to my riddle retreat within ones self
    and in the attic of your mind, take that box off of the shelf
    and look down and see that which is a childs wealth.

    Take out the thoughts, the dreams, the childs love
    shake them well , wipe off the dust
    Then sit within the hovel of your mind
    Try to understand just what you have lost

    And when you see it all so clear,
    Prehaps you'll shed a little tear?
    Hold this feeling close and dear.

    Take down the box put its contents on display
    Then live your life as you would have a child play
    In honesty and truth finding pleasure in each day
    Let hope and trust together light your way.

    And stand for all the world to see
    Take pride in who and what you be
    And Say:"Look this is me!"
    This is beautifully and rhythmically presented and I am deeply moved.

    “Those who seek to satisfy the mind of man by hampering it with ceremonies and music and affecting charity and devotion have lost their original nature””

    “If water derives lucidity from stillness, how much more the faculties of the mind! The mind of the sage, being in repose, becomes the mirror of the universe, the speculum of all creation.

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    i really love 'being'. i reread it a few times, and got something new with each read. i am constantly harping back to childhood as the greatest source of inspiration and as a centering and anchoring thing that some of us just don't think about enough. ah the innocence and the bliss and the simplicity of childhood.

    thanks for this poem!
    grow flowers from where dirt used to be

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    I like your poem, because it is simple,If we think for a bit ,we feel those things in the morning

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    .. wow well thank you everyone praise is always welcome..
    Quote Originally Posted by Pendragon View Post
    When did you become such a wonderful poet? Where have you been hiding your talent? You shine brightly!
    Thanks pen, but really these have been here since like forever. 2005 Anyway. I just keep addig/ putting up my stuff here becuase I figure a) if its on the internet I cant mysteriously accidently lose it and b) autoatic copyright ... not that I need to copyright it as its nevre getting published but yeah.
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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    Manchester Blues

    Its been far too long, but Ive had the first stanza stuck in my mind since dember, the rest is bad, but I thought if I started I might suddenly open up the dams so to speak.
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    It rains here, mate!
    Nigh on 500 days a year
    Swear its true.

    The sky is leaden grey
    But beautiful in a strange
    Mancunnian way.
    Gay!

    Blue? Here?
    In the sky?
    Tell a lie!
    Dems’ Magic buses


    You don't get no Blues in Manchester
    except the fans of course
    cheap drinks, cheap food, cheap shops
    what mores you want?
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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    ! i love the rhythmn nightie!
    "Come away O human child!To the waters of the wild, With a faery hand in hand, For the worlds more full of weeping than you can understand."
    W.B.Yeats

    "If it looks like a Dwarf and smells like a Dwarf, then it's probably a Dwarf (or a latrine wearing dungarees)"
    Artemins Fowl and the Lost Colony by Eoin Colfer


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    Get Lost

    So it worked and such is the result...
    Ok so not aimed at anyone, a facebook status was what triggered it. Just so people know.
    DO you thing the bit about sell yer troubles sounds like i am buying or selling troubles?

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    Get Lost

    Pack up your sad face and
    walk away from me
    I don’t need it anymore.

    Was I ever heard to say
    Store your troubles here with me ?
    Did you ever hear me hawk
    Buy yer troubles here one and all?
    So go away,
    Just walk away
    Leave.
    Go on

    I’ve played this game before
    You are gonna leave one day
    so walk your troubles out the door
    Today.

    I’ve my own tangle to unweave
    My own self to deceive
    Troubles bottled on the wall
    Propped against the open door
    And yet you bring me more.
    My mission in life is to make YOU smile
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