Enjoyed
acrostic in b-flat
miniature creature rests upon me
of intricate design, of subtle browns
tolerates my shallow breath, my beating
heart; abides the fan cooled air
8/18/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Enjoyed
acrostic in b-flat
miniature creature rests upon me
of intricate design, of subtle browns
tolerates my shallow breath, my beating
heart; abides the fan cooled air
8/18/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 08-19-2022 at 03:02 AM. Reason: edit
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Lol! Enjoyed "acrostic in b-flat"!
Prosaic acrostic
Windy weather
inclement icicles
no sun
temperature 9º
ever feels like 6º
rain soaked ground.
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Wonderful acrostic Hard for me to imagine icicles in S.P.
Autumn... misinterpreting ee cummings (lol)
Autumn exists between you and I and
gladness fills these, my sweet foothills.
It was in the spring of this very year
(a spring of cleanup after snowmageddon's chills)
I welcomed the glad warmth of the sun's face
—tailor, pinxit, a painter of words.
Some who speak “Allemand”... may ponder
is Goethe exempt from heaven’s grace,
in an engraving belonging to my friend ?
Whom I salute, by what is near to us;
and in a gestured city stilled in anticipation of the
twilight of Spring....and the dream of dreaming
within a dream—
And I fall back, quietly musing,
though autumn remains indisputably between us,
whence death’s peculiar kiss ?
ref: https://cummings.ee/book/and/poem/so...tualities-vii/
8/20/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
I prefer the "interpretation" to the original, in spite of its tragic question! Even poor Goethe was called in, e.e. cummings as the new Romantic.
Icicles
Pendant winter jewels,
gems of nature
that melt
at the first rays
of sun.
Humans strive
to build bridges
between summer
and winter,
abridging autumn.
Rather than the icicle,
the Cristal.
Icicles in São Paulo would look like that:
https://br.freepik.com/fotos-premium...o_21622640.htm
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Very nice Icicles in S.P. !
I see you caught some of the allusions in my poem. For the uninitiated:
My misinterpretation of ee cumming's poem contains many "near" elements:
S1 is essentially myself currently in Summer relative to Danik 16 in Winter (since we're in separate hemispheres), ergo Autumn between us. I need to clean up the "snowmaggedon" allusion... too parochial.
S2 is Danik 2016... (Allemand, French for German) with Goethe's, Poe's, and ee cummings' nuances (and many others) with regards to dreams within dreams); the city S.P. in winter looking to Spring. The lines alluding to Goethe himself are a bit vague... need to clean up here a bit too; perhaps change Allemand to the more appropriate "Alemão" ?
and S3 reminiscent of Dark Muse, re: a line she wrote years ago: "poison upon my lips" in a 3-part shared haiku buried on LitNet; the "autumn" here more existential.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
duplicate bug
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Latest revision:
misinterpreting ee cummings (lol)/revised
Autumn exists between you and I and
gladness fills these, my sweet foothills.
It was in the spring of this very year
(a spring of cleanup after record snows)
I welcomed the glad warmth of the sun's face
—tailor, pinxit, a painter of words.
Some who speak “Alemão”... may ponder
is Goethe exempt from heaven’s gate,
its entrance belonging to my friend ?
Whom I salute, by what is near to us;
and in a gestured city stilled in anticipation of the
twilight of Spring....and the dream of dreaming
within a dream—
And I fall back, quietly musing,
though autumn remains indisputably between us,
whence death’s peculiar kiss ?
ref: https://cummings.ee/book/and/poem/so...tualities-vii/
8/20/2022 r.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
I am flattered to be represented in your poem as S2.
I actually liked the expression "snowmageddon's chills", it carries a personal and maybe local flavor.
"is Goethe exempt from heaven’s gate,/its entrance belonging to my friend ?". You don´t mean certainly that I consider myself a better poet as Goethe.
I liked very much your use of the seasons in the poem. But the end "whence death’s peculiar kiss?" chilled me somehow. I am superstitious.
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"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
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• Prolly right: going with "a spring of cleanup after snowmageddon" in my archive.
• lol... Poetic license
• Haven't come up with anything better re: "death’s big rotten particular kiss." misinterpretation... I'll keep playing.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
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Torquay and Darnay
There once lived in Murray,
but it might have been today,
The poet Torquay
and a friend
Versifire Darnay.
One day,
the month was May,
Torquay said in a poetic way,
That versifire Darnay
thought himself a better poet
Than Goethe.
When Darnay
saw the display
he recoiled in dismay:
Aiaiai!
Never did I say
or even imply
such an enormity!
'cos Goethe,
Even if clay today,
Is still the greatest poet
In the German language.
The sly Torquay
just blinked an eye:
It´s just poetic license.
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Enjoyed... lol... very cryptic. One garden path leads me to William Topaz McGonagall, https://wearesouthdevon.com/worlds-w...tiful-torquay/ and Charles Dickens. An interesting locale Torquay https://www.camsecure.co.uk/torquay_harbour_webcam.html , home of Fawlty Towers as I recall... and they have a bowling alley !!!
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
lollollol-I swear I never ever heard about this unlucky poet, nor about any place called Torquay. The nearest I come to Torquay was the italian poet Torquato Tasso. I was looking for rhymes in "ay" with T and D. The name Darnay yes, is stolen from Dickens.
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
lol
Orange... an acrostic
Oblate spheroids - expect juice
Raw concentrates need dilution
Aggressive peels add zest
Natural color paints delight
Gastronomic treats in the key of C
Explicit expressions of joy
8/24/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Enjoyed!
Garden-acrostic
Gentle ground
Abundant ants
Random roses and Rosies
Daffodils and ducks
Earthly Eden
Nurturing Nature
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Acrostic & alliterate
flowers
floral fastidious fantasies
lyrical loquacious lilac lubencies lovely
occasional orchids ornamental offerings overcome
wisteria wonderlands wow
ebullient edelweiss evanescences effloresce
roses rhapsodize
snapdragon's sweet soliloquy
8/26/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015