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    acrostic in b-flat

    miniature creature rests upon me
    of intricate design, of subtle browns
    tolerates my shallow breath, my beating
    heart; abides the fan cooled air

    8/18/2022

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    Lol! Enjoyed "acrostic in b-flat"!

    Prosaic acrostic

    Windy weather
    inclement icicles

    no sun

    temperature 9º
    ever feels like 6º
    rain soaked ground.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
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    Wonderful acrostic Hard for me to imagine icicles in S.P.

    Autumn... misinterpreting ee cummings (lol)

    Autumn exists between you and I and
    gladness fills these, my sweet foothills.
    It was in the spring of this very year
    (a spring of cleanup after snowmageddon's chills)
    I welcomed the glad warmth of the sun's face
    —tailor, pinxit, a painter of words.

    Some who speak “Allemand”... may ponder
    is Goethe exempt from heaven’s grace,
    in an engraving belonging to my friend ?
    Whom I salute, by what is near to us;
    and in a gestured city stilled in anticipation of the
    twilight of Spring....and the dream of dreaming
    within a dream—

    And I fall back, quietly musing,
    though autumn remains indisputably between us,
    whence death’s peculiar kiss ?

    ref: https://cummings.ee/book/and/poem/so...tualities-vii/

    8/20/2022

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    I prefer the "interpretation" to the original, in spite of its tragic question! Even poor Goethe was called in, e.e. cummings as the new Romantic.

    Icicles

    Pendant winter jewels,
    gems of nature
    that melt
    at the first rays
    of sun.

    Humans strive
    to build bridges
    between summer
    and winter,
    abridging autumn.
    Rather than the icicle,
    the Cristal.


    Icicles in São Paulo would look like that:
    https://br.freepik.com/fotos-premium...o_21622640.htm
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
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    Very nice Icicles in S.P. !

    I see you caught some of the allusions in my poem. For the uninitiated:

    My misinterpretation of ee cumming's poem contains many "near" elements:

    S1 is essentially myself currently in Summer relative to Danik 16 in Winter (since we're in separate hemispheres), ergo Autumn between us. I need to clean up the "snowmaggedon" allusion... too parochial.

    S2 is Danik 2016... (Allemand, French for German) with Goethe's, Poe's, and ee cummings' nuances (and many others) with regards to dreams within dreams); the city S.P. in winter looking to Spring. The lines alluding to Goethe himself are a bit vague... need to clean up here a bit too; perhaps change Allemand to the more appropriate "Alemão" ?

    and S3 reminiscent of Dark Muse, re: a line she wrote years ago: "poison upon my lips" in a 3-part shared haiku buried on LitNet; the "autumn" here more existential.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    duplicate bug
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    Latest revision:

    misinterpreting ee cummings (lol)/revised

    Autumn exists between you and I and
    gladness fills these, my sweet foothills.
    It was in the spring of this very year
    (a spring of cleanup after record snows)
    I welcomed the glad warmth of the sun's face
    —tailor, pinxit, a painter of words.

    Some who speak “Alemão”... may ponder
    is Goethe exempt from heaven’s gate,
    its entrance belonging to my friend ?
    Whom I salute, by what is near to us;
    and in a gestured city stilled in anticipation of the
    twilight of Spring....and the dream of dreaming
    within a dream—

    And I fall back, quietly musing,
    though autumn remains indisputably between us,
    whence death’s peculiar kiss ?

    ref: https://cummings.ee/book/and/poem/so...tualities-vii/

    8/20/2022 r.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
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    I am flattered to be represented in your poem as S2.

    I actually liked the expression "snowmageddon's chills", it carries a personal and maybe local flavor.

    "is Goethe exempt from heaven’s gate,/its entrance belonging to my friend ?". You don´t mean certainly that I consider myself a better poet as Goethe.

    I liked very much your use of the seasons in the poem. But the end "whence death’s peculiar kiss?" chilled me somehow. I am superstitious.


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    • Prolly right: going with "a spring of cleanup after snowmageddon" in my archive.
    • lol... Poetic license
    • Haven't come up with anything better re: "death’s big rotten particular kiss." misinterpretation... I'll keep playing.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    Torquay and Darnay

    There once lived in Murray,
    but it might have been today,
    The poet Torquay
    and a friend
    Versifire Darnay.

    One day,
    the month was May,
    Torquay said in a poetic way,
    That versifire Darnay
    thought himself a better poet
    Than Goethe.

    When Darnay
    saw the display
    he recoiled in dismay:
    Aiaiai!
    Never did I say
    or even imply
    such an enormity!

    'cos Goethe,
    Even if clay today,
    Is still the greatest poet
    In the German language.

    The sly Torquay
    just blinked an eye:
    It´s just poetic license.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    Enjoyed... lol... very cryptic. One garden path leads me to William Topaz McGonagall, https://wearesouthdevon.com/worlds-w...tiful-torquay/ and Charles Dickens. An interesting locale Torquay https://www.camsecure.co.uk/torquay_harbour_webcam.html , home of Fawlty Towers as I recall... and they have a bowling alley !!!
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    lollollol-I swear I never ever heard about this unlucky poet, nor about any place called Torquay. The nearest I come to Torquay was the italian poet Torquato Tasso. I was looking for rhymes in "ay" with T and D. The name Darnay yes, is stolen from Dickens.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
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    Orange... an acrostic

    Oblate spheroids - expect juice
    Raw concentrates need dilution
    Aggressive peels add zest
    Natural color paints delight
    Gastronomic treats in the key of C
    Explicit expressions of joy

    8/24/2022

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    Enjoyed!

    Garden-acrostic

    Gentle ground
    Abundant ants
    Random roses and Rosies
    Daffodils and ducks
    Earthly Eden
    Nurturing Nature
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    Acrostic & alliterate

    flowers

    floral fastidious fantasies
    lyrical loquacious lilac lubencies lovely
    occasional orchids ornamental offerings overcome
    wisteria wonderlands wow
    ebullient edelweiss evanescences effloresce
    roses rhapsodize
    snapdragon's sweet soliloquy

    8/26/2022

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
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