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    On the road, but not! Danik 2016's Avatar
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    You´re right, it´s incongruous. Made some changes in the poem above
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    Love the changes

    Fog

    Dank and wet
    Beclouds my senses
    I enjoy its obscurity
    A misty haze

    6/4/2022

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    Interesting poem!

    Going global

    If here the sun shines
    and there it rains
    And on the
    other side of the planet
    snow and ice abound
    what is the weather today?
    #Stay home as much as you can and stay well

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    Enjoyed your question poem Global weather today: is droughts/floods/snows/rains/haboobs/hails/sleets/tornadoes/tropical depressions/etc

    Revised my latest poem above due to a bit of redundancy:

    Fog

    Fog…
    Its dankness
    Beclouds my senses
    Though I enjoy its obscurity
    A misty haze


    6/4/2022 r.6/6/2022

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    Last edited by tailor STATELY; 06-06-2022 at 07:52 PM. Reason: try it again :)
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    Thanks. I prefer the first version of "Fog", it seems more intuitive ( less explanatory) to me. If you allow me the boldness of a suggestion:

    Fog

    Dank and wet
    Beclouds my senses
    wrapping them
    in a misty haze
    I enjoy its obscurity
    #Stay home as much as you can and stay well

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    Tentatively

    Footprints in the sand,
    traces of words
    Outlined vultures
    fleeting lights
    where, oh where
    has my memory
    gone?
    #Stay home as much as you can and stay well

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    Quite existential... enjoyed the metaphors. I like your take on Fog.

    cherry blossom

    bright
    a lazy day
    a cherry blossom upon
    a young lady falls delicately
    light

    6/7/2022

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    Marvelous mounds
    majestic mountains
    magnificent mesas

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    Missed this one Dark Muse... enjoyed

    malaise and ennui

    malaise and ennui
    they shackle me
    without my dreams

    8/13/2022

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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