You´re right, it´s incongruous. Made some changes in the poem above
You´re right, it´s incongruous. Made some changes in the poem above
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Love the changes
Fog
Dank and wet
Beclouds my senses
I enjoy its obscurity
A misty haze
6/4/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Interesting poem!
Going global
If here the sun shines
and there it rains
And on the
other side of the planet
snow and ice abound
what is the weather today?
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Enjoyed your question poemGlobal weather today: is droughts/floods/snows/rains/haboobs/hails/sleets/tornadoes/tropical depressions/etc
Revised my latest poem above due to a bit of redundancy:
Fog
Fog…
Its dankness
Beclouds my senses
Though I enjoy its obscurity
A misty haze
6/4/2022 r.6/6/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 06-06-2022 at 07:52 PM. Reason: try it again :)
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Thanks. I prefer the first version of "Fog", it seems more intuitive ( less explanatory) to me. If you allow me the boldness of a suggestion:
Fog
Dank and wet
Beclouds my senses
wrapping them
in a misty haze
I enjoy its obscurity
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Tentatively
Footprints in the sand,
traces of words
Outlined vultures
fleeting lights
where, oh where
has my memory
gone?
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Quite existential... enjoyed the metaphors. I like your take on Fog.
cherry blossom
bright
a lazy day
a cherry blossom upon
a young lady falls delicately
light
6/7/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Marvelous mounds
majestic mountains
magnificent mesas
Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe
Missed this one Dark Muse... enjoyed
malaise and ennui
malaise and ennui
they shackle me
without my dreams
8/13/2022
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
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