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    A Hotel in Florida

    In the stunned heat of
    a day in July
    A woman is leaning from
    the fifth-floor window
    vodka at elbow
    she watches the evening
    undressing before her

    she checked in 2 days ago
    her breathing has changed
    from panicked
    to shallow
    to normal

    across the highway a heron
    standing on one leg
    is lost in thought
    letting the world go by
    as it must

    she carries the vodka to bed
    lifts the glass and drinks
    listening to the electric buzz of insects
    tires humming over concrete
    planes moving through time zones

    it is the time to kill time
    lying back on the bed
    she lights one up

    the stillness of a hotel painting
    looks placidly her way
    sensing the evening shadows
    lengthening across the room.



    woman on beach by Tony Walton, on Flickr
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    Beautiful poem! Enjoyed your ability to paint with words, Tony!
    #Stay home as much as you can and stay well

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    Quote Originally Posted by Danik 2016 View Post
    Beautiful poem! Enjoyed your ability to paint with words, Tony!
    Thanks. It's getting really quiet on the forum. Just got off off the "Poetry" page on Facebook. It's really awful. All of the 'special interest' groups on facebook are awful. Crazy clickbait. Dumb posts. Wish we could get some more migration back to here.

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    You are right, Tony. Me too. I am now on WLF too, but itīs a very different vibe.

    The technical continuous log out is also a problem that discorages users, specially Newbies.
    #Stay home as much as you can and stay well

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    Good poem!

    I find, regarding the technical issues you guys are talking about, that if I click the "stay logged in" box, that that solves the problem you guys are talking about. But the newbies may not be aware of this. And that may be discouraging new people. I think you guys are right.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Danik 2016 View Post
    You are right, Tony. Me too. I am now on WLF too, but itīs a very different vibe.

    The technical continuous log out is also a problem that discorages users, specially Newbies.
    I am on WLF. Can members post poetry on there? (I don't see a thread for posting poetry)

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    You captured it succinctly sir. Well done.

    Atmosphere and surroundings are so important, even if the human activity of transporting a g&t is minimal.

    I'm glad I'm not the only one finding it bloody quiet on Lit Net. When I originally joined it was jumping!!!!

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