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    Dear Lady

    I brought you everywhere
    heart racing beauty and
    your razor wit, ravaging you in
    dark places seen only by mirrors

    But
    Now we go nowhere
    goldfish in an unquenchable bowl
    looking at the spinning clock
    through a furtive window and

    raging until the angry shafts of light
    cut through blinds scorching
    regrets and sworn goodbye
    too deep, too fast
    a damn mistake for

    you are shallow as dust
    on a table railing against reason
    taking gold with your straw man soul

    What pressure you put my blood under!
    But my heart has charged and
    I have cut your credit cards

    toilet paper hotel virginia by Tony Walton, on Flickr

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    Just to be sure: this poem is not about a woman or girl - and there's enough metaphors for even church goers to know what it is.

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    Not a clue, but I liked the word play

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    Reminds me of the prostitute. But that would be about a woman or a man.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    Quote Originally Posted by Danik 2016 View Post
    Reminds me of the prostitute. But that would be about a woman or a man.
    Some people say it reminds them of cocaine being one's lady mistress, with references to a straw (snorting device) and credit cards (used to cut it into lines), and dust on a table, and then the photograph has the word "high" in it. But alas I am innocent and my life consists of movement from church to work and helping the unfortunate. I, just like the reader, do not know of such things.
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    These are convincing arguments, specially coming from the author of the poem.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    May God find you in high places.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Buh4Bee View Post
    May God find you in high places.
    For me, that's church. Amen. Awoman.

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