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    Executioner, protect me Kyriakos's Avatar
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    Hi, this is a brief prose-poem of mine

    A man looks outside and thinks: “This street is dirty, and how repulsive are the expressions of the passers-by. No sense of unity in their crooked movements and sideways furtive stares; they might as well have been crude antagonism personified”.

    To such a man normalcy is already unbearable and so he does not sense that things can get worse. And if, in a flash, the furtive stare would change to raised hand, and the street’s corruption would acquire a crimson tint, it’s a superfluous danger, like a shark approaching one about to drown.

    I also narrated it, here:
    βῆ δ᾿ ἀκέων παρὰ θῖνα πολυφλοίσϐοιο θαλάσσης·
    (he walked silently on the edge of the loudly heard wave-breaking sea)
    Iliad A:34
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    Minimalism for a prose poem... A+ for presentation.

    Enjoyed very much...

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    Short but profound story, very fitting for these pandemic times, when the normal suddenly becomes dangerous. I also loved the presentation and the (Greek?) accent.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
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    Thank you both!
    Yes, I have a very Greek accent ^_^
    βῆ δ᾿ ἀκέων παρὰ θῖνα πολυφλοίσϐοιο θαλάσσης·
    (he walked silently on the edge of the loudly heard wave-breaking sea)
    Iliad A:34
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    Lack of unity and connection, perhaps the strongest predictor of violence. Enjoyed very much. You have a wonderful reading voice. I feel I could listen to poetry like this for hours.

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