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    anxiety

    it is a little bit
    lonely
    when silence homely
    solidify
    hearing anxious
    runs out of functions
    and registers tensions
    life ventures electrify
    sound vibrations rise
    and purifies the only way is high
    low says bye.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Quote Originally Posted by cacian View Post
    low says bye.
    I particularly like the simplcity of this little sentence, there's something freeing about it.

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    With apology I used your poem as a word list and came up with:


    anxiety (dis-assembled)


    bit anxious -
    a homely low
    ... way it is

    of ventures... little

    lonely is the only high

    when tensions rise and
    functions electrify
    hearing runs out -
    sound vibrations solidify
    silence registers

    life says:
    "bye"

    and purifies


    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    Quote Originally Posted by YRKB View Post
    I particularly like the simplcity of this little sentence, there's something freeing about it.
    YRKB many thanks for reading and the feedback.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Quote Originally Posted by tailor STATELY View Post
    With apology I used your poem as a word list and came up with:


    anxiety (dis-assembled)


    bit anxious -
    a homely low
    ... way it is

    of ventures... little

    lonely is the only high

    when tensions rise and
    functions electrify
    hearing runs out -
    sound vibrations solidify
    silence registers

    life says:
    "bye"

    and purifies


    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    Hi there tailor and thank you for reading.
    This is a very interesting version but how do you mean by
    word list?
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Hi, cacian,

    I identified myself perfectly with these verses:

    "it is a little bit
    lonely
    when silence homely
    solidify
    hearing anxious
    runs out of functions
    and registers tensions"

    Enjoyed also tailorīs version.
    #Stay home as much as you can and stay well

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    Sorry for the confusion... Found Poetry:
    Traditionally, a found poem uses only words from the original source. However, poets have developed many ways to work with found language. Rearranging word order, inserting line breaks and stanzas, and adding new language can be part of the process. Check out these six popular approaches to creating found poems... https://www.thoughtco.com/found-poetry-4157546
    In my version I only used your words (35 total) essentially just re-arranging the words you used (and added none), and adding line breaks and punctuation as needed; it makes for a bit of a stilted presentation in spots (which I may revise at some later point). So, it's a found poem of a poem

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    Quote Originally Posted by Danik 2016 View Post
    Hi, cacian,

    I identified myself perfectly with these verses:

    "it is a little bit
    lonely
    when silence homely
    solidify
    hearing anxious
    runs out of functions
    and registers tensions"

    Enjoyed also tailorīs version.
    Danik thank you for reading and the feedback.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Quote Originally Posted by tailor STATELY View Post
    Sorry for the confusion... Found Poetry: In my version I only used your words (35 total) essentially just re-arranging the words you used (and added none), and adding line breaks and punctuation as needed; it makes for a bit of a stilted presentation in spots (which I may revise at some later point). So, it's a found poem of a poem

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    I see. It is an interesting method. Thank you for that.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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