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    Incinerate

    Throw your torch!

    Flame-spitten to an ash-wilted pyre
    and watch amongst the phantom hordes,
    a publicly relished rage,
    writhing to fuel a fire.

    Breathe with soft lips upon the embers,
    Heat exposed beneath my feet,
    and deny with a vehemence
    that our lips ever did at one time meet.

    Voice your grievance,
    one in a one-thousand voiced choir,
    and let the cacophony burn in my heart,
    the sound of only your voice,
    forever that does not expire.

    And I could have been anyone
    when anyone would do.
    Not lovingly chosen
    but hunted instinctively in pursuit.

    And I fed the flames
    which once made me feel protected and complete
    but which now make me nothing
    but disappointment disposed of at your feet.
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    A wonderful start. All my poems are subject to revision at any time... sometimes after many years.

    "And I fed those flames
    which once made me feel protected and complete
    but which now make me nothing
    but disappointment disposed of at your feet."

    This sentiment hits a chord within me having experienced being discarded and recently having to relive all the emotions that are associated (it's so complicated!). I'm still processing my feelings with prayer and tears... perhaps a poem or two may result.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    This has some very raw and significant emotions that you convey well in your imagery. I particularly felt the pain at your conclusion. These are my observations of your poem

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