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    Wrong turn

    Route inputted into GPS
    Hmm, poor reception
    I'll have to rely on my own sense of direction.

    Im pretty sure I've made a wrong turn.
    I think I've made this turn before.
    If I recall,
    This road goes for some miles before a turn around.
    [I don't have time for this.]
    The radio is scratchy
    "You've lost that loving feeling... Gone, gone, gone"
    I remember this song, it's an oldie,
    but still relevant.

    Of course there would be construction!
    Detour
    25 miles per hour
    If I could only just turn around.
    This road has been in need repair
    I hope it will be better when this is all over.
    [I don't have time for this]

    Well, isn't that a beautiful sunrise
    One you could just lose yourself in,
    or find yourself in.
    I forgot how much I loved it here.
    I remember running through those silver fields
    crunching shards of winter frost
    and balancing on the clear creek's glass,
    right over there,
    laughing as my feet plunged in.
    Towering trees, lost in leaves, your hand guiding me.

    "Gone, gone, gone... Woh a woe ah"

    I'm going to be late.
    I'm running low on gas.
    What if I run out before I get back?
    or
    What if I just run over that cliff edge?
    Plenty of time when
    You never turn back.
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    This is great Shadowlight. I really enjoyed the ride and the dark turning at the end. Your narration kept me interested throughout. Good job

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    I’ve also been inspired by this to go back and read some of your previous posts. Although I commented at the time ‘Remnant Goodbye’ is also still outstanding.

    For those who believe,
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    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Love this one.

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    Don’t want to go on but found myself reading it again. There is a sub story of loss though buried threatening to emerge and lead to the end of the poem. At least that’s how I read it with the guidance of the song and the memories. Proper great poem Shadowlight.

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    Well captured piece.

    Thoroughly enjoyed it.

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    Im glad you all enjoyed it.
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    You have a knack for unburying the buried Jerry.
    Last edited by Shadowlight; 01-26-2020 at 12:46 AM.

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    The thing is Shadowlight I don’t like reading poetry that much. There was a time there was a regular crowd on here, some good, but would get in the habit of complimenting people you like. To be honest a lot of the time I was reading out of loyalty rather than interest. Not all the time. But. Can’t be denied that activity and dare I say standards have dropped here in recent years for what ever reason. Myself included of course. Your poem above grabbed me. I wanted to read on. Not just felt I should. It was multi layered. It was relatable. It interwove real life of the sat nav and the journey with the deeper undercurrent. For me it was something I read on here and proper enjoyed. Guess you got that by now.

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    I've been coming on here for a long time Jerry, I know how you feel. There are so many people I miss who used to share here: PrinceMyshkin, DarkMuse, JBI, qimissung, etc. It is so wonderful when I see the works of those who I recognize over the years still here...you, Pompey Bum, MystyrMystery, miyako, tailorstately, Hawkman,etc Im sure Im missing quite a few. LitNet may not be what it used to be, a thriving forum bursting to the brim with an exchange of poetry, ideas, and deep connections. Surely, it has slumped, but it still a place people come to. Maybe not everyday, but when they need it, and for many that is enough. But for you, I think you want more than that, than what Litnet can offer in terms of kinship/friendship/involvement and that is why you have a hard time struggling with what happens to everything...inevitably, everything changes. I think that that sometimes makes you feel dissatisfied with this place and the standards you set for it. I hope you can find more of what you need in your life Jerry, and that this wont seem like a distrusting crutch. That itll become a place you can appreciate again.

    I had a feeling you'd like this one. You have your tastes strong 1st person narrative of a broken character in a envision-able scene with a dark turn.And that is just my style, LOL! sometimes anyway. Somethings are just real no matter how you wish them to be different.

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    I still pop in this bar from time to time. I imagine everyone is sadly wandering around social media(facebook, twitter, instagram), still I don't see why they do no migrate back like I'm trying to do.

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    I had a feeling you'd like this one. You have your tastes strong 1st person narrative of a broken character in a envision-able scene with a dark turn.And that is just my style, LOL

    That was massively astute of you Shadow. I don't analyse what I like but you nailed it there. You have a fan in me

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