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    It wasn't me Jerrybaldy's Avatar
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    To my son

    Goodbye my son
    The blood may be thicker
    Than the water
    But blood was colder than it oughta
    Be.
    Goodbye my son
    I may meet you
    In a queue for a supermarket
    Ten years from now
    Just a flash behind the eyes,
    That’s my dad.
    There were no goodbyes
    And the checkout is waiting
    Cornflakes, detergent
    Urgent.
    Cheerio my son
    Trolly with a wonky wheel
    Won’t kill
    You.
    You look like your mother.

    I see you back on the swing
    Innocent, mouth wide
    Knew what made you happy
    For a while
    Pushing you toward
    the afternoon sun
    Turned the saddest day
    To fun.

    I watch you walk away
    Through the car park
    Head covered by your grey hood
    For good.
    Goodbye my son.

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Thanks for this offering Jerrybaldy, very touching. As a coincidence I viewed the movie short Bao last night https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cB_2qU4GLCw with some of the family.

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    That is real quality, there, JB. Live and be well - H

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    Did your son pass Jerry?
    My hide hides the heart inside

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    Great work Jerry.

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    It wasn't me Jerrybaldy's Avatar
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    Hi all thanks for commenting. No didn’t pass just decided not to be in touch anymore. Thanks again

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Thank you for sharing this personal and touching piece Jerry. Love and loss is so hard, it hurts like hell. The memory on the playset and knowing what made your son happy just brought me to tears. I recently lost someone and the thing that kills me is knowing I will likely never hear his booming laugh again in response to one of my stupid jokes, gosh it just hurts. Seeing me only brings them pain and urgency to get away. Your poem really struck a chord. Im sorry Jerry, for it to be your child, it's got to be incredibly hard. Love to you, I hope for you some peace.
    Last edited by Shadowlight; 01-20-2020 at 10:45 AM.

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