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    Wrong turn

    Route inputted into GPS
    Hmm, poor reception
    I'll have to rely on my own sense of direction.

    Im pretty sure I've made a wrong turn.
    I think I've made this turn before.
    If I recall,
    This road goes for some miles before a turn around.
    [I don't have time for this.]
    The radio is scratchy
    "You've lost that loving feeling... Gone, gone, gone"
    I remember this song, it's an oldie,
    but still relevant.

    Of course there would be construction!
    Detour
    25 miles per hour
    If I could only just turn around.
    This road has been in need repair
    I hope it will be better when this is all over.
    [I don't have time for this]

    Well, isn't that a beautiful sunrise
    One you could just lose yourself in,
    or find yourself in.
    I forgot how much I loved it here.
    I remember running through those silver fields
    crunching shards of winter frost
    and balancing on the clear creek's glass,
    right over there,
    laughing as my feet plunged in.
    Towering trees, lost in leaves, your hand guiding me.

    "Gone, gone, gone... Woh a woe ah"

    I'm going to be late.
    I'm running low on gas.
    What if I run out before I get back?
    or
    What if I just run over that cliff edge?
    Plenty of time when
    You never turn back.
    Last edited by Shadowlight; Yesterday at 08:41 PM.

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    This is great Shadowlight. I really enjoyed the ride and the dark turning at the end. Your narration kept me interested throughout. Good job

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    I’ve also been inspired by this to go back and read some of your previous posts. Although I commented at the time ‘Remnant Goodbye’ is also still outstanding.

    For those who believe,
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    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Love this one.

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    Don’t want to go on but found myself reading it again. There is a sub story of loss though buried threatening to emerge and lead to the end of the poem. At least that’s how I read it with the guidance of the song and the memories. Proper great poem Shadowlight.

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    Well captured piece.

    Thoroughly enjoyed it.

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    Im glad you all enjoyed it.
    Last edited by Shadowlight; Yesterday at 08:57 PM.

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    You have a knack for unburying the buried Jerry.
    Last edited by Shadowlight; Today at 12:46 AM.

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