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    strict

    there was passion
    in the beginning
    and now it has turned
    a lesson
    love is made out to feel
    out of fashion
    constant without
    a question
    has ran out of emotions
    it is lost on repercussion.
    doubt astonish
    it has become a stoic
    it thrives under
    heroic.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Enjoyed this little offering.... the title throws me off a little bit though.

    This is how I scanned it with line breaks:

    "there was passion
    in the beginning

    and now it has turned

    a lesson
    love is made out to feel
    out of fashion
    constant without

    a question
    has ran out of emotions
    it is lost on repercussion.

    doubt

    astonish

    it has become

    a stoic
    it thrives under
    heroic"


    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    Last edited by tailor STATELY; 10-03-2019 at 09:52 AM. Reason: "
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    Last edited by tailor STATELY; 10-03-2019 at 09:50 AM. Reason: duplicate bug
    tailor

    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    Quote Originally Posted by tailor STATELY View Post
    Enjoyed this little offering.... the title throws me off a little bit though.

    This is how I scanned it with line breaks:

    "there was passion
    in the beginning

    and now it has turned

    a lesson
    love is made out to feel
    out of fashion
    constant without

    a question
    has ran out of emotions
    it is lost on repercussion.

    doubt

    astonish

    it has become

    a stoic
    it thrives under
    heroic"


    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
    tailor
    taitor STATELY many thanks for reading and the feedback. I liked the way you scanned it.
    Sorry about the title. I could not think of what to put so I just put
    strict
    instead.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    On the road, but not! Danik 2016's Avatar
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    Loved this poem, cacian!
    "You can always find something better than death."
    Jacob and Wilhelm Grimm, The Bremen Town Musicians

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    Danik thank you.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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