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Delusion?

I was unaware that questioning your posts made me "delusional".

You are more criticizing than CRITIQUING. Every post you make is just to put down what I have written, yet gives me...

Have you ever thought about Hell? Have you read others' own perceptions of Hell? It is never ending bad noises and never ending insanity. Whatever again.

The "only" represents the feeling of...

I feel like this was aimed at me.

But I am no Poet, so I know this to be not true.

And in my mind, I am not so Young either.

Harsh realities have hacked my mind.

Carving incessant...

This poem has a sort of Chekhov's Gun to it: You don't know what the tragedy is exactly until the last two lines. All you know is a man killed a girl and he was executed for it.

Then the last two...

"Residing fears where only to be brave" - The man is a soldier, he should be full of bravery and courage, but where the bravery and courage should be in his heart all he can feel is fear.

The...

I love it.

But I would not find enduring love by staring into my own reflection... I know that for sure.

Or perhaps they just weren't a$$holes about every post they made. Like I said, I used to READ a lot here, and it was a MUCH more positive vibe. This past week, everything I read seems to spew out...

This may/may not be my final thread on Lit-Net. Very experimental, I actually had it written on three pages with backwards writing on the back pages to continue reading by turning pages back.

I...

I used to read a LOT of other peoples work, but I never felt worthy of commenting on them. The occasional positive comment, but that was it on these forums. I just read. I lurked. That's why I have...

Bump this for Hillwalker too. :)

I'm bumping this up for ol' Hillwalker, maybe he will like this rhyming poem as much as the others who posted did.

Or maybe the crowd here just really changed dynamic.

I would like "entering"...

Yes, thank you Aunt Shecky, great advice.

Once again though, I will remark it was a simplistic piece and if I truly cared about it, I would have shown it to close friends and not posted it in a...

If you can't tell this is a simple poem.

Maybe I am the only way who works this way, but I only post experiments and the simplest of written ideas. This is one poem I posted due to it's simplicity...

Critically speaking of a poem is one thing, but saying "And those who think your poetry is ***** (myself included I regret to say)" is NOT acceptable.

That is NOT Constructive Criticism of this...

Thank you for the post, that is actually much more helpful. I appreciate it immensely.

Because there is almost always an exception to every rule... :D

I thought it was a pretty straight-forward poem though, I would explain but I'd rather see if anyone else reads it first.

The problem is the only thing you could say to add tension would be to put it in a first person narrative, I thought I made it clear it was not to be that way before I posted the story, hence my...

Did you miss the part where I say it is an test based on the "action"? As n depicting an action scene? As in "I did not care about or even think of a plot" for this device to help with my writing?
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Wow, basing your perception of ALL of my poetry from one poem I mostly wrote at a graduation party then finished later?

What a PRICK a thorn might bring...

Not a poem at all, just an idea I had which others enjoyed reading. Thank you though :)

I was waiting for some feedback on this small, very brief piece before posting a more experimental, yet much...

This is a short, short piece I wrote simply as a test for written action and how tension could be added or improved by writing and working on such a piece.

Without further ado, here is "Cars,...

A seed which flutters in the wind has no control. A random landing, then specific conditions to be met for the seed to grow.

Absolutely no control.

There is a saying that, "The seed that...

Because everyone who reads my material wants me to get published and I would like to do so myself. Can't get published if people think your writing is **** (unless you're Stephanie Meyer, that is).
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Maybe the true meaning is hidden when read by random strangers.

I showed this to a confidant (ex-teacher) who knows I have no military experience, and he figured out exactly what I was going for...

Thank you. The "Hope" and "Help" lines were my personal favorite after finishing this poem. :D