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I Digress
Sitting at a window table in the cosy Pizza-carto looking out on a bright day. Everything looked right with the world until, that is, you saw the leaning angle of the people walking down...
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That one and half glasses of red wine mood.
If only life could be lived in that one and half glasses of red wine mood. Less would not achieve it, more would destroy it.
The mood where you...
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Thank you for your comments I do see what you mean and I have used that in other stories but this time I wanted it to be a sudden pull up short shock. I read your story very good .
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I enjoyed that a reflection on our times.
Liberty
Ray sat in the covered cockpit of his inshore fishing boat. In front of him the Sunday newspaper in his hand a mug of strong, hot, sweet tea. In half an hour the tide would be high enough...
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The Bed
The sound of a sharp slap followed by a raucous cry heralds the arrival of another infant into this world. The mother looks up from the bed and is told it is a boy or it is a girl and...
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That one and half glasses of red wine mood
If only life could be lived in that one and half glasses of red wine mood. Less would not achieve it, more would destroy it.
The mood where you mourn...
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Thank you both. Punctuation was never my strong point but I take the point and will try to be more mindful of the need in the future.
Shufflin’ Sid
He made his way slowly along the well trodden and well remembered path. Once he had run, no raced along this self same path, once he had strode along this self same path, once he...
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I tried to send a PM to Admin, then the administrator ans finally Admin007. as follows " Twice I have submitted an offering to this forum; twice it has gone to the mods; twice it has disappeared...
I tried to send a PM to Admin, then the administrator ans finally Admin007. as follows " Twice I have submitted an offering to this forum; twice it has gone to the mods; twice it has disappeared...
I've posted it again and it says it has gone to a moderator for vetting or some such which is what it told me last time.
I posted this short story not brilliant but it just disappeared
The Coma
Very gradually the sound of church bells filtered through his subconscious. The room was in darkness and through...
Well that was a waste of time; posted a first offering of a short story a few days ago allowed time for scrutiny and - - - - - - nothing.
Question what is the point?
The Coma
Very gradually the sound of church bells filtered through his subconscious. The room was in darkness and through that darkness he heard his Anna calling to him. His mind in a turmoil...