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"Resist it-no...ignore her" Henry struggled to block out the feeling of Stacey moving up against him as she tried to get warm. Henry knew that he should have just taken the coat off and given it to...

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Another cycle was near its end; light fading to darkness, heralding the time when their father would arrive home again. The child knew that whatever their father brought back for them...

What else could I use instead of the word "park" because it isn't much of a park the way I envision it.

Okay, here it is:

Scarries <=D

When Ivan awoke only faintly aware of his...

Well I did this short story before I watched the twilight series, so werewolves were still seriously cool to me and still are in my own mind when twilight isn't involved or vampire diaries for that...

I'll see what I can do ;)

Wow, what can I say? That was one hell of a short story. I wish werewolves in movies (curse twilight, lol) were more like how you described it, and the history described by Sheebra was much more...

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Because I was first to hand this in, my teacher made me go back and work on it some more. So I've done what 'hillwalker' suggested and shortened some things and changed a few other bits and pieces my...

Thanks again. You've help me out heaps with this and I'll continue refining it like you said. I have to hand it in tomorrow though, so I'm unsure if I'll be able to fix up the part where it says the...

Ahhhh! Creepy! How the hell didn't he know not to unlock the bloody door! Fool! I should have his head skewed onto a spear for the crows to enjoy. XP Awesome read.

Thanks again =P Haha. People are so helpful here ;)

Wow, that was amazing. I felt sick reading it. There were some very small bits and pieces that needed to be fixed, but I'm sure you'll see them when you go over it again ;) amazing story btw....

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I've decided that saying offspring and siblings instead of children was actually to alienated and it does sound better saying "child" instead of "offspring".

Awesome, that's perfect. I'll do that instead. Thank you =)

I know what you mean and thanks :) I'm trying to find a different way of describing or hinting to the reader, just what a "cycle" is. If you have any suggestions, that would be a great help! =D

Okay, I'll do my best to fix this. Thx ;)

There, I tried fixing some of it up. I haven't gotten rid of transversely until I'm sure that it means something other then what I've been told.

They arn't children =/ I call days cycles because thats what they are to them. I accept what you've said and am trying to use it to fix this up, although I thought 'transversely' was another word...

Thanks! This helps so much, you got no idea, lol. I need to get the highest grades I can. Everything people suggest to me on here, I'll fix and apply to my work like what you said =) I'll try put...

deleted for good =/ finished, thanks for the help! =D