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    Hello and welcome

    Hello and welcome
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    My Only Wish

    How could you, an angel of light
    Fall for a monster like me?
    Your feathered wings soft as night
    Against this stormy sea.

    Your heart, bright as diamond;
    Mine, as black as onyx
    And yet your...
  3. Thread: Regret

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    This poem isn't so much a philosophical opinion...

    This poem isn't so much a philosophical opinion of an idea, its actually drawn from personal experience and emotions. The reason I wrote "a single, foolish flame" is because it was only one mistake...
  4. Thread: Regret

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    Regret

    A life misled;
    A path walked alone.
    The road paved with silver and gold,
    Is now nothing but thorns and stones.

    The candle that was lit
    Has burned itself out
    Now that the Light has been...
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    Thanks for the constructive criticism, but I...

    Thanks for the constructive criticism, but I don't worry too much about the structure or flow of a poem. I focus is on getting my emotions onto paper, regardless of how it looks. But I will take...
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    Describing Perfection

    I gaze at pictures of her,
    Each a snapshot of perfection.
    The glow of her light can be seen
    Even through the dull polaroid.

    Her eyes, her cheeks, her lips,
    All so full of life.
    Nothing could...
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    I originally wasn't going to add the smiley, but...

    I originally wasn't going to add the smiley, but after a few second thoughts, I had too. And forgive me for no replying so quickly. I just got back from a rather long underway.
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    thank you for the constructive criticism. it is...

    thank you for the constructive criticism. it is greatly appreciated
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    Damn...

    Very well done. I can tell you've been at this for sometime now. I tip my hat to your skill.
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    Facebook Persona

    A name not mine,
    A face unlike me.
    A picture and profile
    Is all that can be seen.

    It has no heart,
    Its soul is emtpy.
    And yet it is part
    Of what I pretend to be.
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    Very nice. You portrayed your emotions quite...

    Very nice. You portrayed your emotions quite well, and in a secondary language. Keep up the good work, I hope to see more of your poetry soon
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    I'm not really too focused on the rhyme and...

    I'm not really too focused on the rhyme and meter. Several others have advised me to drop it, so I have. Come to think of it, you're one of them. I mainly just focus on putting my emotions on...
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    Pain on Paper

    How can I compete against
    That which is not real?
    A beign of flesh and blood
    And a figment of imagination

    She is in love with him.
    Dark hair, glistening eyes
    Eyes thast lead her down to
    An...
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    Ok, I get the basic of the story, but you'll...

    Ok, I get the basic of the story, but you'll probably want to put more into it. I mean, put yourself in the position of the reader and ask the same questions we would. Then use the answers to...
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    Good start, but...

    Ok, sounds suspenseful. Two questions:How do the punks relate to the story and how does Mr. X die?
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    The ending really portrays the heartache felt. ...

    The ending really portrays the heartache felt. This sounds something like high-society literature. Nicely done.
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    Was up?

    I haven't been on in a while so, was everyone up to?
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    Thanks

    Wow, I've never had a reply quite like this one. You pretty much read right to the heart of it all.
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    O.d.

    I could not bear to see the sight
    Gone form her eyes, life's beautiful light
    Cold, pale, and dead she lay
    The vile syringe still in her vein

    I startled awake from the horrible nightmare
    In my...
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    I almost did graduate a year early with a...

    I almost did graduate a year early with a Certificate of Proficiency and 15 College Credits. But, my recruiter told me that a Diploma is the best thing for enlistment. So, I'm still here.
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    Wow

    Unusual, yet well put. I still have a few months of fun, but The thought of walking is still on my mind.
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    Graduation

    The time has almost come
    The time is almost nigh
    I will face the setting sun
    And say my last good bye

    The ending of a story
    Marks the beginning of a saga
    Of a rise to glory
    Or a fall to rock...
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    For me, sexy means cute, yet evil. but, that's...

    For me, sexy means cute, yet evil. but, that's just me.
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    I really don't have any other time to write, so I...

    I really don't have any other time to write, so I might as well.
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    I actually wrote a poem on Insomnia in this...

    I actually wrote a poem on Insomnia in this forum. Please check it out.
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