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  1. Thread: Hemorrhage

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    Hemorrhage

    A disarray. Then it happened.
  2. Thread: The Pier

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    a pleasing use of couplets, "coupled" with an...

    a pleasing use of couplets, "coupled" with an austere manner of imagery has the mechanisms of the poem working in harmony with each other. thank you for the read!
  3. Thread: Feeding Hour

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    Feeding Hour

    Our Feeding Hour

    He was.
  4. Thread: My Absalom

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    a nice economical use of language which is...

    a nice economical use of language which is complemented quite nicely by your choices in imagery. the colors hone in at a nice speed and seem really effortless in their inclusion. really nice work.
  5. Thread: Translation

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    thank you both for your kind words. i've posted...

    thank you both for your kind words. i've posted this one for some feedback. hopefully some others chime in.
  6. Thread: Translation

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    Translation

    There once was a poem here.
  7. Thread: confession

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    really enjoy your use of word economy, coupled...

    really enjoy your use of word economy, coupled with your choice in structure.
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    Seeing Ourselves Hallucinate in Water

    Seeing Ourselves Hallucinate in Water

    You put the windows down, and
    for minutes, the human effect took control,
    pulled you under me, and you were

    happy. Nothing could make us
    leave. Even...
  9. Thread: Unions

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    very nice subject. a nice harmony between poetic...

    very nice subject. a nice harmony between poetic description and layman recollection. also, the intimacy of the poem is strangely apparent, and its use of consonants become a sort of iconography...
  10. Thread: Kathmandu

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    the introspection of Kathmandu is well realized. ...

    the introspection of Kathmandu is well realized. the appropriate images are filtered nicely, and the pivoting of the author keeps the text moving at the pace it needs to. the first and last stanzas...
  11. Thread: Private Harvest

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    Private Harvest

    Private Harvest

    In the fifth stage of sleep you
    you open me up. Down the middle,
    the head separates, then the sternum.
    The pelvis breaks. Piece by piece, I vanish.
    Every time, the hand...
  12. Thread: Jewels

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    retina and gravid are amazing words to use in the...

    retina and gravid are amazing words to use in the poem. very nice pace, as well as theme. i suppose photos really are ineffective at some level, huh?


    dyne
  13. Thread: stoopid pome

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    gimissung is correct i think. i too, would...

    gimissung is correct i think. i too, would recommend a title change. this would infuse the poem with so many possibilities! such good stuff, as usual


    dyne
  14. Thread: My Crazy Shadow

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    yea it is a great ending. i like how you parsed...

    yea it is a great ending. i like how you parsed the piece bit by bit as well. it did wonders for the pacing
  15. Thread: Graft

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    Graft

    Graft

    Not tenderness, but the relentless need to savor
    obsession. I have practiced for many years at this.
    Even in dreams I do this: slipping in like a

    contagion, then the voluptuous panic of...
  16. Thread: Morning Notes

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    i enjoyed this. the sparseness of the language...

    i enjoyed this. the sparseness of the language helps to emphasize the poems intent. quite ambiguous. powerful, really. nice work.


    dyne
  17. Thread: Matricide

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    Matricide

    Matricide

    I was something else when I was young. I hated you,
    thought the only way to get rid of you would
    be to have a blood transfusion and funnel you

    away from me. Thatís how much I hated...
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    Soap Without a Name

    Soap Without a Name

    I touch my face so much,
    Iím worried it will wear down
    like soap. No discipline, Dad says.
    But the truth is, I have it in spades.
    Yet like a marble dropped
    in a bowl of...
  19. Thread: Escape

    by dyne7
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    i think there is a power to be found in this...

    i think there is a power to be found in this poem, although i am unsure whether or not it was supposed to be that way. that isn't a question of authenticity, merely a question of intent. it goes...
  20. Thread: The Shearing

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    The Shearing

    The Shearing

    Suddenly, we are alone
    in a bruised field
    where the wings of
    swarming locusts
    beat us senseless,
    and with our skin crumpling
    like paper, magenta and darkeningó
    our eyes close.
  21. Thread: We

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    great word usages and buildup towards the end of...

    great word usages and buildup towards the end of your piece. appropriate use of the senses, just enough too, like the balance between the tangible and ambiguous. great work

    dyne
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    Of Blood and Light

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  23. Thread: Cordova

    by dyne7
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    Cordova

    Cordova

    Hurt. So simple a word. Esther says in Cordova, dreams are like liquid,
    tangible, a colossus. So what? Fondness. That is what ends us.
    Ask Isadora. Isadora and her scarves. She...
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    'the neglect of many seasons' great line right...

    'the neglect of many seasons' great line right there. sums up the entirety of the poem, personal, and evocative.
  25. Thread: Goodbye Poem

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    evoking images. very unusual ones, but the...

    evoking images. very unusual ones, but the imagery is the soul of this poem.
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