Reminiscences
So many things are flying inside my head,
Like dusts in the desert, scatterring in the air.
Once, I smashed the mirror in the state of emptiness,
As the world turned colorless...
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Reminiscences
So many things are flying inside my head,
Like dusts in the desert, scatterring in the air.
Once, I smashed the mirror in the state of emptiness,
As the world turned colorless...
Thanks so much Derky for your comprehensive and honest comment about this collection! Perhaps, I will try to rework on this collection by considering your nice suggestions.
Thanks so much Deryk for your comment! I'm glad that you liked the form. I tried editing the lines which seemed cliches but I am not sure if they look nice than before. I really appreciate opinions...
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As I look at your windows,
I think of you.
You are elusive.
I feel powerless.
I can't help myself.
Feelings break me apart.
Thanks Morpheus for your opinion about this piece! Perhaps I should consider on changing the lines that seemed cliche. I appreciate your opinion.
Yes, the title is now better! Thank you Tailor!
Thanks so much for your comment and your suggestions! I really appreciate that! I have updated the post with some corrections..
Do the...
This silence portrays the bleak facet of truth
Your obstinacy crawls in my skin and bleeds
The feelings that pull me inside your fence
but the wings of my desires fly somewhere else
Your tender...
I felt the sincerity in your writing! Nicely finished poem!
I liked your witty and unusual advices! :) Thanks PrinceMyshkin! Putting women's undergarment is quite unusual trick to better writing :).
When you flew away,
bleaching the alleys of dreams,
I silently admitted my defeat.
In your colorful world,
you breathe a different air,
where these echoes can't reach.
I still walk the same...
great work, DM! I loved this one!
I liked its metaphors and imageries, and its title too! Keep up your good work! :thumbsup:
I liked the mood and imagery of your poem! It's nice! :cheers2:
I started writing these small pieces, since last many weeks, which turned out to be an anthology. So, I posted all of them as a single piece. Thank you for pointing out the repetitive usage of "I"s....
Thank you for your comment, Beautifull! I appreciate that! :)
I still cling onto the thorny stems,
hopelessly, as an insect,
looking to your exquisite petals,
but you will spread your petals,
only for an another bee,
letting it drink your youthful...
I like it too! The last two lines are my favourite!
Our quests will never end
The endless universe expands
Starlights travel endlessly
Days and nights duplicate
Changing seasons cycle
Chores of nature perpetuate
The sky is everchanging...
Nice work, DM! The lily and the rose as metaphors worked in your poem! :thumbs_up
I am moved by this poem. This portrays many vivid imageries!
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I look at your windows.
I think of you.
You are elusive.
I feel powerless.
I can't help myself.
Feelings break me apart.
Thanks Blazeofglory for appreciating this poem! You certainly have a nice command on the words and the language which can be felt while reading your comment and it was poetic too. I wrote these small...
Qim, this is marvelous poem having a profound voice! Your poem has strong vibes and used metaphors are nicely connected! Keep up your good work! ~Dib
Thanks all for your comments! I appreciate comments and perceptions! I intended these poems to be motivating and philosophical rather than too poetic. I was just writing what I experienced in my...
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Put on some colorful desires,
Like the decorative wallpapers,
Covering the fragile emotions,
On the tainted walls of heart.
Don't kill yourself every moment,
Striving for beautiful...