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And thus spake the Prince! It is wonderful to see these flakes of your observation again.

Ah it feels like in spite of all his efforts, the only music he wants to hear is that of the phone ringing.

One way or another - Blondie

Romance in the dark- Lil Green

Thanks for bumping up some of the old poems posted here, Nikolai. I myself don't read or write much these days, but boy do I miss the old group in LitNet!

The mighty LitNet says I haven't been active in too long a time. Since I haven't been writing for a while now, I thought the only way to share anything of value is to bump this thread up from the...

This pain of pleasure. This pleasure of pain. All in one packed word.
Before I could feel it, I met it – in that ragged cliff where the land of language meets the sea of literature, that very edge...

https://soundcloud.com/symphonied/my-gaelic-attempt

Can't anyone see just how desperate I am? Someone just teach me the damned language already!

Thanks b|v and angliholic for the comments. I've been looking forward to some feedback.

b|v, I corrected the "maybe", the punctuation, and tense in lines 4-5, thanks. I just put parentheses...

That bad?

Hey Delta, I thought it could be better if trimmed down a little bit. I'm not saying this is it, but just for example:

Those long dusty tracks
that stretch for weeks.
They get you singing to the...

I loved the idea and how you started the poem. Clever. I just kind of lost the awe in the 2nd stanza, though. I thought the first 3 lines of S2 weren't really necessary. Same goes with several parts...

They’ve sent the flowers away
to another country, another world.
But we have fireworks that bloom
at night; by the time the next light flashes
your face has changed.
Maybe another night we would...

I have a feeling I can only appreciate Version 2 better because I have read Version 1 now. So thank you for both. I also like the mention of 'authors of textbooks' at the end of version 2 as it tends...

Whart?

"This process would start with Regius."

Descartes' Bones by Russell Shorto

Hmm I might just change that to "into" if it's so troubling, but I quite like "flirt of the skirt" though- it helped me construct the image I wanted here. The title "balalaika" came because this...

Being bored is almost a shameful concept to me- there's always so much to do! But I guess we all have been there where we can't seem to help it.

The poem made me think so strongly of this steady...

Ah, at last some feedback. Thanks Silas.


"In to" seemed to follow the beat more nicely at the moment.


That was the idea.

So much in so little- something I think I'll always look up to. Thank you for this.

This poem is so...fragrant.
Now I want to go out and dip my toes in the wet grass outside, without any slippers on.

I don't know, is this the new thing? Writing bad poetry to get comments? If it is, it seems to be working well enough.

I'm so glad you found it worth coming back to. From the lack of comments I thought it's just too vague and abstract to appreciate. There were such sharp feelings behind this that it was hard to keep...

I like the loss of rhythm when your breath is stilled. Lovely.

I feel like I want more of the conversation than the explanation.