Glad to hear I'm not alone in my feelings, Manichaean. I've actually considered writing an imitation or parody of the types of stories I've seen getting published in these literary magazines just to...
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Glad to hear I'm not alone in my feelings, Manichaean. I've actually considered writing an imitation or parody of the types of stories I've seen getting published in these literary magazines just to...
Thanks for your reply, Manichaean. Yes, I think you and I have had many similar experiences in our lives and in our travels. Your stories, based on your experiences, always reminded me of my own...
Very nice to hear from you. You always, always gave me great advice for editing, rewriting, and fine tuning my stories.
Thanks, Danik. Yes, I remember your name, too. I'll try and come back here from time to time.
I’m curious to know what luck people here have had in trying to get their writing published. I’ve written 27 short stories and had one published (in the Birmingham Arts Journal). But that was more...
This is not really a short story. I just thought I would say hello here to old friends as I've been gone from this Forum for about 4 years now. I see some familiar names -- AuntShecky, MANICHAEAN,...
It's truly disheartening to hear that. I, for one, have used this Forum to solicit suggestions from members on how to improve drafts of short stories I've posted here - with the intention of making...
Salinger's The Catcher in the Rye contains a lot of humor. Some of it appeals to me; some doesn't.
I came across Our Admirable Betty by Jeffery Farnol quite by accident. The characters are...
I overheard a short clip on AMC. I wish I knew what movie it was from. It was Dean Martin's voice saying, "Oh, these women! There was one knocking on my door last night for thirty minutes - but I...
The dreamlike quality of the overall piece is appealing. The plot is slow-moving but is able to hold my interest. My earlier comments about diction still hold - when a writer's style draws a...
It's a good start, and I hope you keep going with it. A couple of comments where it might be improved:
I used to start off my stories with a sentence or paragraph of description of the setting to...
Interesting. Entertaining. Even thought provoking. Good post!
I like this. Mostly I like the originality of the plot. (I'd be willing to bet that a real-life experience was the inspiration.) Your writing is, as usual, impeccable. The last half of the latest...
Thanks for the bit, Steve. Fun reading. You were almost shocking in that first paragraph!
I'm curious about the green liquid - are we supposed to know what that is?
It looks like you set the...
I like that, ennison. All good points.
Interesting poem, DATo. It's all nostalgic, and then at the end you give it a bit of a twist. I've sort of gotten away from poetry the past several years. I'm nor exactly sure why. But I like...
Hi Manninu88,
First suggestion: If you have several chapters to a story, best to post them as a reply to your first post. That way, readers will have all the chapters in one place.
I have to...
Sorry I missed this when it was first posted. It's a really good story. I like it for its uniqueness. The entire plot changed half-way through (like in Alfred Hitchcock's The Birds), and then,...
Very nice, DATo! Short but sweet, as they say. I knew of course that there would be a twist ending, but I thought it was going to be a puppy dog. So you ended up surprising me after all, and your...
Brevity (continued)
“It’s nothing. It’s just… It’s just I miss you so much.”
“Sweetheart, I know you very well by now. There is something else bothering you. You don’t want to tell me?”
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Hi everyone. It's been a while, in fact it's been just over one year since I wrote a story. Well, here's one for you. Darker than most, and definitely has adult themes. Since it's about 3500...
I like this a lot. I like the simplicity of it, and the simple writing style of short, declarative sentences in short paragraphs complimented the simplicity of the idea. And I like the portrayal of...
Well, several emotionally charged scenes come to mind - the final scene of Herman Hesse's Siddhartha, Dickens' description of the death of Little Nell, and the entire chapter six of A Tale of Two...
Hi ThomasRS,
Please take my comments as they are meant - as constructive criticism. The main criticism that I have is that it just seems like you are trying too hard. This manifests itself in a...
Have you ever noticed that in all the depictions of Adam and Eve, they both have belly buttons? Think about it.