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  1. Thread: Reborn-poem

    by Ammaria
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    Poll: I liked this poem. It had good flow and rhythm...

    I liked this poem. It had good flow and rhythm except one line...."to the thrill of hunting"...should, judging by the rest of the poem, rhyme with "i crave for spring no more". Other than that it...
  2. Thread: Lazy Brutes

    by Ammaria
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    Poll: Sorry, apstudent, but you set yourself up against...

    Sorry, apstudent, but you set yourself up against spongebob of all people...er sponges. Maybe if you get a catchy theme song or something. D HAHA
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    I can't criticize it really...its just too good. ...

    I can't criticize it really...its just too good. Comparing it to my own poetry, it would be as if I were trying to critique the poetry of Robert Frost. oops I mean this...I'm not just trying to...
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    Poll: Honestly, its full of cliches. It doesn't flow...

    Honestly, its full of cliches. It doesn't flow well, like a rocky path for the tongue. I've read your other poems and wonder what happened with this one. <shrug> -?
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    When I was in highschool one of the counselors...

    When I was in highschool one of the counselors came into one my classes and taught a course on dream interpretation. The basic gist of what he said was everything in the dream including the people...
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    The books that influenced me most were One Flew...

    The books that influenced me most were One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest by Ken Kesey, The Giver by Lois Lowry, and My Antonia by Willa Cather. And I can't forget The Giving Tree by Shel Silverstein...
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    I really like this poem. It is so true regarding...

    I really like this poem. It is so true regarding the ugliness of youth. It is an issue I've thought about but you put it into words so well. Especially the last couple lines...."It was then one of...
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    I like Matt's suggestion too. Or something along...

    I like Matt's suggestion too. Or something along those lines. It gives one a sense of finality and maturity on your part (whether or not its true wink ).
  9. Thats a good start. Honest, thoughtful, a little...

    Thats a good start. Honest, thoughtful, a little mushy as a love poem should be wink . The question is what does your sweetie think of it?
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    I really enjoyed "Mr. Andrews" by E.M. Forster...

    I really enjoyed "Mr. Andrews" by E.M. Forster and "The Awakening" by Kate Chopin. (Although that last one is more of a novella.)
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    I don't think she'll like it but I do think its a...

    I don't think she'll like it but I do think its a creative way to give her a metaphorical slap in the face and help her recognize how her actions affect other people. (And I agree with Phoenix Tears...
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    Ok then...here's the criticism. The basic...

    Ok then...here's the criticism. The basic structure of this poem is good but it feels like a rough draft, as though you've quickly gotten out the thoughts and feelings you wanted to convey. Now it...
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    I like the way you portray feeling through words....

    I like the way you portray feeling through words. However, reading your poetry gives me flashbacks of my highschool boyfriend. It reminds me of the things he'd say and his view on life at the time....
  14. Thread: why books?

    by Ammaria
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    For me the act of holding the book in my hands is...

    For me the act of holding the book in my hands is satisfying, as opposed to a remote control. Ever since I can remember I've loved the feel and the sound of pages turning in my hands. I guess I...
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