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    I can't say I have anything particularly...

    I can't say I have anything particularly interesting to say, but I quite enjoyed this. Smacked of Hemingway at times, in that sort of complex simplicity kind of way. First time reading you. Good...
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    The Changer

    Chapter 1

    The wind howled through the old window panes of Percy’s bedroom. Here he sat on his bed, bored with the day, looking longingly through the window as it rattled ever so slightly with the...
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    I Lived In Death

    Pale, I bathed in the moonlight of death,
    Beneath the tombs of the lonely stars.
    Vacant it slipped from me, my last breath
    That gleamed in a cold light from afar.

    With the petals that glide so...
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    This was interesting. I definitely appreciate...

    This was interesting. I definitely appreciate the macabre and your thoughts came through well. One suggestion I might add, and take this as simply my opinion, in the end, rather than taking us...
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    I guess the whole two hunter thing was just my...

    I guess the whole two hunter thing was just my first idea...I liked the concept of the hunter deciding he'd rather kill the deer's predator than be one himself. However, I didn't like the idea of...
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    My original thought is that the hunter is so...

    My original thought is that the hunter is so overwhelmed by the majesty and beauty of the deer that even though it epitomizes everything he always wanted to display on his wall, he can't bring...
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    Thanks for the comments. I know a lot of focus...

    Thanks for the comments. I know a lot of focus has been on my overly-descriptive style, but one of the major reasons I posted this here was to see what people thought about the story itself,...
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    by MorningForger
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    The "it can see the light" sort of lost me....

    The "it can see the light" sort of lost me. Who/what is "it"? It isn't "you," so it must be "midnight." So is midnight seeing light? Maybe I'm missing something, but I guess that's the point. I...
  9. Thread: Dylan

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    I quite enjoyed this. Very whimsical and the...

    I quite enjoyed this. Very whimsical and the rhyming perfect. Well done.
  10. I'm with 108 fountains on this. I read it...

    I'm with 108 fountains on this. I read it through several times yesterday and almost wrote a reply on here, but kept thinking, "I'm not following this at all..." so I ended up not posting anything. ...
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    Ah yes. I see what you mean now. I have this...

    Ah yes. I see what you mean now. I have this idea in my head of what is happening and I want to make sure the reader gets it, but perhaps I'm giving the reader too little credit. I may be assuming...
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    I appreciate the feedback, you two. At the risk...

    I appreciate the feedback, you two. At the risk of sounding defensive, one of my goals with this piece, being very short with little plot, was to be as descriptive as possible. The whole thesaurus...
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    Nostalgia Blurred

    I went walking on through the woods during the rain
    The whispers of the pines were swirling around me
    They said, “Go on and masquerade with us in vain”
    I wore façade and felt the moss, but could...
  14. Thread: Bus Stop

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    Excellent!

    Excellent!
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    Paul wrote the majority of the song, "Michelle,"...

    Paul wrote the majority of the song, "Michelle," but an interesting concept nonetheless.
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    The White Deer

    The White Deer
    By A.M. Smith

    The dawn was moments from breaking and a hunter silently perched among the treetops. His lookout had been crafted by his own hands the summer before. He had labored...
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