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I would like to add that I gleaned a few nuggets of knowledge from Hillwalker and co., but the more I submitted, the more I felt that the shortcomings in my stories were focused on without positive...

The anthology is called Stories on the Go. I received no pay for it, but I did not mind, since my story was joining dozens of others (this is an anthology of flash fiction, i.e. stories of 1,000...

Thank you. :-)

Jack of Hearts:

Look at what you wrote. You are sounding like a classic internet bully now, not a writer.

Another thing: I was a slush reader for Every Day Fiction from the summer of 2013 to the spring of 2015. It was an invaluable learning experience, including how good short stories are written.

Improvement is important to me. As I noted above, I had a peer-reviewed short story published in an anthology last year. I listened to what my peers had to say because they were respectful and did...

Jack of hearts:

I let writers who are more professional review my work for me now. In fact, I got a peer-vetted short story published in an anthology last year.
I came to this forum expecting...

I bumped the thread because I felt my treatment here was borderline internet bullying. Whenever I provide feedback to an author, I always do it in a sensitive, respectful manner. Here a lot of people...

This story of mine remains scrapped.

"This was creepy - I'm not sure whether it's meant to be, but the narrator behaving like some deranged stalker was quite an original idea to come up with..."...

Varenne:

To be completely honest, you were always hypercritical re: my old romance attempts. I also felt your recommendations that I turn my boy meets girl, boy protects girl story into a "horror"...

FYI: the short story I published is a war story. The other stuff I wrote and posted here has eithier been scrapped entirely or is undergoing massive revision.

Due to an excess of negativity...

Hi all,

While I've stopped sharing my stories here, I did want to drop back in with great news: it took an unconventional approach, but now -thanks to Lulu.com- the short story I posted and shared...

Never mind deleting, but I am done posting my fiction here. I'm going into "lurk" mode I think ...

Its been fun, though! :-)

This has been removed due to the reason listed below.

I hate Norman Bates, Hill, and wish he had wound up on Dexter Morgan's table.

I don't consider mom my "best friend", she's just ... mom. And there are times my mom drives me so nuts I give her...

This story is now down because of massive re-write issues your constructive feedback revealed. Thanks. :-)

(aside from the odd part where it seems too forced)

Could you point that part out to me? Thanks.

Hill:

So what if this was meant to be on "Planet Cussler", dude, but in a more subtle way?

I'll grant this needs tweaking, but as a man, I am the first one to admit I can't get into a woman's...

Hillwalker:

Could you please relax, sarge? Why does everything I write creep you out, man? Why oh why must you slam my stuff with the likes of "One is tempted to post a ‘Creep Alert’ at this...

Removed due to massive re-write issues.

Hmmmmm ...

This is going back to the drawing board big time.

Thanks for the feedback, everybody. :smile5:

Varenne:

You are correct this tale shows lack of understanding of women. I sent you a PM explaining why because I'd rather keep the gory details off the boards here.

Jack:

Relax, dude. I'm...

Varenne:

What if I give the girl in the above story a hint of mutual attraction? Would that drag it out of the "creepy" mud?

BTW: how come this romantic fable of mine did not stray into the "chick lit" area? Because it is so to the point and agnst-free?

A screaming irony here: I didn't study the "chick lit" genere at all before I wrote this!

Seriously, my goal is for this to be a tale of true feeling suppressed until something ugly allows them to...