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Had a microwave dinner today.
It wasn't bad
but it was nothing to write home about.

Hi Steven. Thank you for the positive review. That's a good suggestion with the sentence re the description of the veranda - makes it more poetic.
This is a rough draft anyway, plus I haven't...

Hi Steven. This was an engaging read. I liked the way you kept a lid on the MC's emotions and didn't let the piece spiral into melodrama, as often is the case with these type of stories (at least...

Not sure if many people outside the UK and Ireland have had the pleasure to watch the TV series Accused, which is now airing its second season on BBC at the moment. It is written and produced by the...

Hi Hillwalker. Nice to see u on the boards again

Yes, ths is just the opening few scenes of a story I 'm in the middle of.
Thanks for the pointers.



Yes that's meant to be twangy
--Cheers....

“Take a cold bath then. It will calm the stinging down,” his mother says to him.
Joe goes in to run the bath, putting his hand in the water every so often, testing it, even though he knows exactly...

B - Hey :) Yeah I think she is maybe a passive character more than weak. Alpha people take advantage of passive people the same way monkeys jockey for leader status...it's a horrible thing to observe...

Thanks B for taking the time to comment. The son is spoiled, but the mother is quite weak in the situation. Spare the rod and ruin the child so the old saying goes...

A - I was thinking of...

TheQuill - Thanks for the encouraging feedback. Yes you're right, that's what I wanted to portray. Thanks for taking the time to comment friend, it means a lot to me.

Delta - I am turning it...

Continued in short story section.

Haven't heard anyone mention Trainspotting.
I think Saturday Night, Sunday Morning should also be given a mention.

You shouldn't be ashamed of yourself - lots of people are addicted to drink/drugs (in alot of cases socially acceptable drugs) and don't have the courage or honesty to admit they are addicted. You...

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Es are Es are good; he's ebenezeer good! :D

Hey thanks B. Always a pleasure to hear from you :)

Hi Auntshecky - as always, thanks for the feedback. I'll take a good look at the first part. All the best.

“Meoooow….” a grey, skeletal looking cat rubbed its head against O’Reilly’s leg as he got down to the last flight of stairs. The cat looked up at him pleadingly, and then mewoed again, more...

Now, I dislike the way the English media over-rates the English team. But I think they still have class individuals: Gerrard, Hart, Terry, Walcott, Rooney - the whole squad has class in spates tbh....

Rooney the most unfit player on the pitch?? Are u serious? He is one of the best forwards in the world. He is a consummate athlete and has to be to play anywhere near the level he does. Wayne Rooney...

This is the opening of a thriller thing I'm working on. Any feedback is kindly appreciated :).


The man had been lying there for what must have been days, a week even. The sharp putrid smell in...

or more pleasurable than watching what he can do with the ball at his feet.

:)

England were poor tonight, against an average team too. Italy will maul them the way they are playing at the...

Hi miyako73. This one has some rich imagery: "Or a muted lazuli or a topaz,
Dull and meek until December.....Or halved whorls of insect wings....."
I found the poem on the whole to be too dense...

Hawk - thanks, as always, for your response. Will have a look at that issue you pointed out. :)

miyako73 - thanks for the feedback. I have to point out that you are wrong in your understanding of...

truth is, i have never taken much pleasure in the visible world;
ideas are better;
and i never feel the need to recreate them with words;
thoughts are better.

so you can keep your grinding...