Nice one, Too-ta! ;)
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Nice one, Too-ta! ;)
Quite unpleasant, but not a bad poem!
Hawk, you are an extraordinarily fascinating individual! And I'm not just saying that because you noticed my shoes :)
I like this one. It's a difficult task to describe something as common as a season change in a new way, but I think you've done it. "Summer rocks herself to sleep" was my favorite line. I might nix...
Thanks, Chris, that's a good idea :)
Needed to read this one again today. I think of it often, Delta, I adore this poem!
I wlll keep this memory
encased in glass
so I may hold it,
bright as a cat's eye marble
that marries light.
Well, if you want a more thorough analysis... the "punks" threw me off as well. I was hoping there was some other colloquial meaning for the word, but it seems not. It doesn't go with the tone of the...
I have read your explanation of this poem, but I'm going to give you my initial impressions anyhow. This poem spoke to me of meekness; it implied that the narrator didn't feel himself worthy of what...
Oh my. This is a poem you feel in your bones. Such heavy sorrow, and raw longing. Another brilliant one from H.
Strangely riveting, with unusual syntax.
Sometimes you just hafta wallow in the past and have a good cry...
I confess I had to look up that reference... but I like the idea :) Hey! My 1000th post!
I KNEW my books could talk! Sometimes I hear them whispering at night...
Tweaked that line a bit. Better? Or is fingertip / fingers too repetitive still?
@Doc, you're right, it was deliberate, but like you I'm unsure of whether it works. Those lines are open for input! Come one, come all, and give it a go :)
@Delta, I actually have many quilts,...
One of those "what the hell, why not?" moments. Glad to see you posting again :)
Does it ruin the fun if I admit it was my husband? I think the babysitter was rather taken aback when we came home sopping wet :)
I'm ready, at last,
to share my place with you,
this willow room where wild chamomile
mingles with sharp-scented yarrow.
Plump honeybees buzz a drowsy strain,
drifting over banks dabbed with...
1983?! Geez, I am ALWAYS wrong about how old people are. It drives me nuts!
"Doomed to remain celibate?" Sorry, that line made me giggle a bit. But I really liked the reference to the "rusted sky."
You had some conflicting imagery here. The narrator is wandering in the "desert," but you mention a "vessel," which brings to mind a boat or ship. "Chandelier" and "carpet" sound luxurious, which...
Thanks for the feedback, tailor... I wanted the overall tone to be one of level-headed practicality... but it really isn't one of my best. My husband's been gone for the past week and I've been...
The Mistress of Kitchen Romance! I have a TITLE! You may now all refer to me as Mistress Adventure.
I couldn't read more than a few lines, but then, I have a notoriously weak stomach... between you and Delta's phlegm, I don't think I can handle any more poems about bodily waste!