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  1. Thread: Calendar

    by firefangled
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    [QUOTE=blank|verse;1224177] Calendar In...

    [QUOTE=blank|verse;1224177]
    Calendar

    In schools teachers cover
    the same hard ground.
    Snow falls regardless.
    ____

    Brush dust from cold bedsheets.
    Open windows wide.
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    This reminds me a little of a James Merrill poem...

    This reminds me a little of a James Merrill poem called A Downward Look.

    You picked some well known territory to write a poem about. It appears you went"back" to a more innocent time and found...
  3. That is something that has been happening with my...

    That is something that has been happening with my keyboard, I think. It only does it in free text boxes. You're correct, I should have caught that. So disregard everything else that I said. I meant...
  4. I am not an expert at sonnets either, and I have...

    I am not an expert at sonnets either, and I have read multiple variations on the traditional 2 or 3. There is nothing wrong with writing a sonnet to "try my hand at sonnets," but you might...
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    Haunted, this is a beautiful, well written...

    Haunted, this is a beautiful, well written tribute. I understand how you must feel; recently I lost a cat named Rascal, very similar to your apt description of Tiger.

    Every word was precious.
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    I like the attempt here to change the venue for a...

    I like the attempt here to change the venue for a love poem. The first stanza is the best, I agree. With a few tweaks. L1 sounds too much like a text book intro and

    L4 might work better if it...
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    Hallaig, this is excellent. You have captured his...

    Hallaig, this is excellent. You have captured his voice very well. His actual voice always reminds me of the actor Kevin Spacey. I enjoyed your choices for communicating the exaggeration and...
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    There's an old adage: Never wrestle in the mud...

    There's an old adage: Never wrestle in the mud with a pig; you both get dirty and the pig loves it. Nevertheless, Caliode, you need to be informed that you are doing nothing more here than picking...
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    Zoo, maybe I read too much into this. I am guilty...

    Zoo, maybe I read too much into this. I am guilty of doing that, but there seemed to be more to it that just laundry and breast feeding.
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    I see trees appearing through the fog on first...

    I see trees appearing through the fog on first thought, but I'm not sure. I was a little confused by the dragons splashing their wings and then being still in the third sentence, with no apparent...
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    I enjoyed the contemporary content of these....

    I enjoyed the contemporary content of these. Though we can write about somewhere else, we are where we are.
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    To me this seems somewhere between the first...

    To me this seems somewhere between the first scene of a play and the first page of a short story. What it is not is a poem. I'm not trying to be over critical of you, Caliode, but it seems to me, you...
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    Very moving image, Caddy. Strong in its brevity....

    Very moving image, Caddy. Strong in its brevity. One suggestion: you don't need the line, "Whose string is broken." I think you clarified broken in the first three lines. Then follow with now L7...
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    Sticky: From Personal Poetry by Delta. Dirty Laundry ...

    From Personal Poetry by Delta.

    Dirty Laundry


    Washboard lies
    wakeful nights
    all that scrubbing
    like a fat irish woman
    whose thick arms have
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    Probably more truth that we would care to raise...

    Probably more truth that we would care to raise against the myth. A powerful portrait, Delta. This is not the language of Sharon Olds, but it is in her realm of perception: tell it like it really is....
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    Thanks for commenting on this Auntie. I wrote 90%...

    Thanks for commenting on this Auntie. I wrote 90% of this in about 15 minutes right after doing just what it says. I'm glad you asked about who Lenny was. It is typically a man's name and I...
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    tents, and we were fireflies in cravaneted jars...

    tents, and we were fireflies
    in cravaneted jars
    strung together and canned—
    but I hated sardines,
    too much salt, kills the snail—
    ears,
    epic nights,
    between the faces of light,
    neither...
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    It is to your credit that you bring such...

    It is to your credit that you bring such amplified language to such solemn content without much strain.



    This line break was jarring to me. Perhaps that was intended, but I wanted to drop "to"...
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    seigniorage

    seigniorage
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    I've read novels in which there are sections that...

    I've read novels in which there are sections that I would call prose poems: Molly Bloom's soliloquy in Joyce's Ulysses; the Time Passes chapter of To the Lighthouse. Here is another by Amy Lowell, a...
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    At the Summit Meeting

    —for Eric Cantor

    We had two
    Alsatian Buckhorn bedimmed,
    emphasized grumble-colloquia
    and the marvelous results.

    The boys must be blind,
    to the perfection of the arrangements,
    shamefaced...
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    Ftd

    I remember
    having to sit
    down, as I heard
    those awful words.

    You’re fit, thank God,
    you’ll get through this.
    You don’t know who
    gave this to you?
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    sgiomlaireached

    sgiomlaireached
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    See a book called How Does a Poem Mean by John...

    See a book called How Does a Poem Mean by John Ciardi. If after that you want to go deeper see A Poet's Guide To Poetry by Mary Kinzie. It helps to understand poetry if you pick just one poet of...
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