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  1. Thread: Paths

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    Passive voice is the biggest issue in the prose...

    Passive voice is the biggest issue in the prose of developing authors. I'm working with an editor to polish my book and eliminating passive voice from the manuscript is greatly improving the quality...
  2. Thread: Becky

    by Grit
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    This link is broken (multiply the http by two now...

    This link is broken (multiply the http by two now what do you see?) and I don't usually think of youtube when it comes to short stories.
  3. Thread: Paths

    by Grit
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    Hi Zudonim, I'm glad to see you post something...

    Hi Zudonim,

    I'm glad to see you post something of your own. Thanks for sharing.

    This reads well for the most part but there's a few issues I can identify.

    We need character's names....
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    Improving writing is a topic I've been longing to...

    Improving writing is a topic I've been longing to discuss at length, though I lacked a place to do so until now.

    These are things I wish I'd known when I started so many years ago, because they...
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    Carol Won The Lottery

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  6. This reads as more of a script than a story....

    This reads as more of a script than a story. There's no description whatsoever, thus, we're left with a dialogue lacking context or time and place. Also lots of discussion re: Ian yet he's little...
  7. Thread: Wolverine

    by Grit
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    As a Canadian, I see our national plague has...

    As a Canadian, I see our national plague has claimed another victim. First they stole the sun, shredding it to bits with mean-spirited pecking. Next they stole our laughter, haunting our places of...
  8. Thread: Jake the spy

    by Grit
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    This one reads a lot better than some of your...

    This one reads a lot better than some of your previous posts. That's the result of taking time and polishing your work. Now that you've taken the time to make your work readable, I will read it.
    ...
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    I have heard the idea as well, I have a 'wait and...

    I have heard the idea as well, I have a 'wait and see' approach to the actualization. Hopefully they don't take the humanity out of writing until I'm dead lol.
  10. Thread: essence

    by Grit
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    Is this sarcastic? 10 out of 10 is literally the...

    Is this sarcastic? 10 out of 10 is literally the 'perfect score.' Did the lack of punctuation, grammar and discernible story say 'perfect' to you? LOL gave me a good chuckle, though I still can't...
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    This really short story achieves a lot...

    This really short story achieves a lot considering the length. The tone is profoundly sad and the perspective is modern. I can see the truth in your words and relate as a writer. The first line hit...
  12. Thread: Cockpit

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    I enjoyed this Jerrybaldy, funny stuff. One...

    I enjoyed this Jerrybaldy, funny stuff.

    One thought occurs to me for improvement. Perhaps the sneeze and blessings could be swapped for greater effect.

    Thanks for sharing.
  13. Thread: A path west

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    Hi Robert, I like the concept of this piece...

    Hi Robert,

    I like the concept of this piece and you're telling a story, but the writing itself needs a thoroughbred edit. My editing style is to show you an example of how your words could be...
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    Hello Again Lit Net

    I've recently experienced the first successes of my writing career. I wrote a novel an editor loved enough to edit at a dollar a page and recently published my first short story in an online...
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    Proper formatting, sentence structure and grammar...

    Proper formatting, sentence structure and grammar would go a long way. As is, this is very hard to read. You mention English isn't your first language and that may be part of the problem. Before you...
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    A post of Liza's, taken from the thread on why...

    A post of Liza's, taken from the thread on why people troll;



    You said it better than I ever could.
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    This isn't anything about good writing or bad...

    This isn't anything about good writing or bad writing. It's about basic human decency and the cowardice of people who like to rip down those who create. Are you jealous? Simply rude? Either one is...
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    Wow. To read this on a short story forum on...

    Wow. To read this on a short story forum on someone's first post. It's appalling.

    Obviously he can write, he wrote this story.

    Next time do the world a favor and save your destructive...
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    No Hands Missing Jaw

    Crowded cities
    It's our place
    a spinning rock flying in space.

    That's why there's
    no control.

    Our people
    covered with mold
    wonder where we will go
  20. Thread: Doom Town

    by Grit
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    Hawkman, I have greatly enjoyed reading the...

    Hawkman,

    I have greatly enjoyed reading the first three parts of Doom Town. There is a sharp sense of humor but also a fierce reality and emotion as when the sisters finish off the young man with...
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    Yet some stories achieve originality. The...

    Yet some stories achieve originality. The statement 'every story has already been written' is confused. Every archetype has been observed in multiple stories for ages, yes, but every story has not...
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    Do you not seek to be a creator of original...

    Do you not seek to be a creator of original works? Every reader compares the story they are experiencing to every other story they've ever experienced. It is not a conscious thing. I would argue that...
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    who is/who's/whose

    who is/who's/whose
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    Pardon my interruption, but a question in my mind...

    Pardon my interruption, but a question in my mind was urging to be asked.

    How exactly do you expect one to read your story "objectively" as opposed to "subjectively"? All beings are by their own...
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    Aunty Shecks, I join the discussion as a...

    Aunty Shecks,

    I join the discussion as a simple reader. I have never figured out editing, I have always hated it and I find it ruins my stories.

    It sounds like you can't turn your editing...
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