I know, the title sucks. Critique?
Rest For All
The hot and humid air hangs like a curtain through the summer,
Keeping me awake against my will.
Atop the covers lying I am sighing just...
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I know, the title sucks. Critique?
Rest For All
The hot and humid air hangs like a curtain through the summer,
Keeping me awake against my will.
Atop the covers lying I am sighing just...
Oh, thank you all so much for the tips and compliments, it means a lot. Jack of Hearts, i'll take your advice. I am sort of/kinda working on another short story right now, and i'll definitely...
Alright, i'll take your advice. I am not planning on publishing it or anything, so it doesn't matter that much, but aside from that matter, how is the writing style in general? Okay? Bad? Decent?
Well of course the first part is scene setting! Without describing where the story is set, how on earth could you envision where it takes place?
Aside from that, you are partially right about that...
I wrote One Dusty Day earlier this year. Still, I don't think it is too shabby so decided to post it here where you all can tear it to pieces like starving dogs. Have at it, boys!
One Dusty Day
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So I have a bi-monthly magazine that comes to my house and I found a contest on it. There was a short story, and the contest was to finish it in 500 words or less. So I gave it a go, but want to know...
Thank you so much for taking the time to analyze this! You have no idea how invaluable people's advice and tips are. Sometimes what needs to be said is a bitter statement, but I like to imagine that...
Thank you so much for your tips! Three and Four are ones that I have never thought of before, and I am sure that they will very much improve my report. I am in 8th grade if you are wondering, and...
Ah yes, I sometimes write like that as well. I just felt one day that I should instead use a simple rhyme scheme. I am not sure why, but I thought that for such a quickly written poem it turned out...
Well... not to go against the grain here, but I liked it a little. I mean, it is a rather sweet poem and while not perfect or to be next up on my memorization list, a sentimental dream. I...
A short poem to reflect a certain lonely existential plight...
Life's Remedy
I never though that I should see,
What earth looks like above the trees.
But here I am up in the sky,
No...
I am to be sending in a report tomorrow that is fairly important to my overall grade, and I have been wishing for someone to pre-read it. I am far too shy to ask anyone I personally know to judge my...
A compound sentence is usually two independent clauses seperated by a comma or semicolon. I seem to do this a lot with sentences. For example:
I heaved a sigh of relief; the watch was still resting...
Yes! You discovered my subtle double-meaning! It was mostly an accident when I realized I created two morals from one story.
I think I use semicolons and compound sentences too much...
Thank you for the critique and compliment! I never realized how good such a simple and even typed sentence can feel.
Horribly intimidating request. Why on earth did you not do this as you were going along? It would be vastly easier than your present predicament...
I see your point. Now that I take a closer look at the paper, I have noticed that it is left at something of a cliffhanger of sorts.
The point I was attempting to convey(no matter how poorly)...
Oh do repost it, I would very much like to read it. Not to get all bi*chy about the style, but to perhaps quietly critique and learn from your work. I promise I won't be cruel...
-Klick
This is a fable; it mirrors the style these stories used to be written as accurately as possible. Consequently it is also quite short.
The Owl and the Jay
Once in the wood there lived...
Hey there, just dropping in for a proper introduction. As it seems, only 1 or 2(or none) will even bother to reply to this, so I am just going to make this brief as I am a busy, busy, bookworm. I'm...