Really good J, I can even taste the gum...
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Really good J, I can even taste the gum...
Argh I must have dementia. Your work is so remarkable in how you portray the underclass and give them a voice.
I don't recall reading anything from you that rhymes
Those. Three. Words. Good taking on the irony.
Per - you own this category, the dead and the undead. Added interest with father complex -- the orange drapes, symbolic, fits. I love you is cheap cheap lip service. Keep going with this!
I'll back with comments, don't go anywhere ...
As punchy as I remember... Like how you ended it.
Jerry, you being you, delivered a good piece about "you", pulling this reader in.
Enjoy this special day Jerry :bday_2: :cheers2:
remembering Kilauea
you open up
like a mountain would
you want me to let you in
the way you have
I’m on the verge
the earth’s paunch churn
the lava lake swells
water closer closer closer
Hi Auntie long time no see. Enjoyed your new iteration of NitLet. See you around!
Peas.
prendrelemick I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting!
Reminds me of someone. So real.
Jerry so glad you are here *clang*
Don't go.........
You have a unique way of seeing life, and that makes your poems so much more interesting and thought provoking.
The last item is truly the best. Every time I'm here I look forward to reading your work. Rock on Jerry.
Hawk, love your version! I am currently reading spacetime and quantum mechanics, my mind is on matter, that was how the first part came about. Some commitment issues but mostly carefree. Thanks for...
a beach in Maui
black sand happens
when ejected lava
melts like dirty hot syrup
hardens on its way down
then plunges into water
it sticks everywhere
we trace on glossy dark sweat
Quite an irony in the title. Reminds me of the BP disaster, even then there are other silent killers as you've shown. Do miss the bayous and Spanish moss, tell me it aint so! Love the part about the...
Impeccable imagery, I can put myself there.
A winter delayed. The transition from outside to inside the closet is very nicely done. I hear and see the geese. I don't think you need to repeat and explain "So late" -- if the writing is good...
I like the premise, but the antithesis of "fighting the flight / for my very life" and then "caring arms to nestle in" seems forced. The part about hearing a "a recognizable voice" is not credible,...
re: high rise, I fell off the tracks; belated thanks.
Hawk, good catch. Counting on a comment and help from you always.
Dieter, hmmmm let’s see… unstuck is like undead, a made up word but...