human diginity
comes with charity
the less we fond
for wants
the more
we let for fun
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human diginity
comes with charity
the less we fond
for wants
the more
we let for fun
I think I understand the intention, but "fond" is an odd word here. It seems like an adjective rather than a verb. Perhaps "fish", as is harvesting, for our wants might work better. I don't know. Just a suggestion. Also "we let" might be better as "that's left". I liked the first two lines.
The placement of 'fond' is very interesting in the above lines and makes them new and nice.
Thank you both very much. YesNo your suggestions are interesting. 'that's left' makes for a different version. I like it.:)