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Good start, compelling POV. I'm not going to call you out on the grammatical
errors and the lower case "i" as they are appropriate to the first-person narrator whom you endowed with a believable, strong voice. Everything about this "rings true."
(So far.)
Looking forward to the next part!
I'm interested too Smer. Agree there is some 'grammy errors' but they can all be tidied up. Good start to an interesting story!
Yes, it's a good start. It seems to offer a 'certain authenticity.' Let's hope for more.
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