jus a small something about being alone I know now where its lost A year thro seasons with no change there happened one unnoticed frost lying on a snow angel in the range not twinkling in the light of sun nor melting to its warmth bright still as a stone to nature, tough. Grown from a strange moiety of emotion a past of, as water under ice . Friend so soully sought unaware who recognised by all but her denying smile laughter with no ringing echo jus neutral its presence heartly accepted nothing lost sharing least flavour like brushed off dust. height of bold and grave guts in the air a friend nor enemy budge buzz of existence of her everything in god's laden path no pain not sad nor fear none requied while none stayed for weird undriven reason. Later it started to melt by touch of a small girl not seen much and thus it sparkled under sun slow yet beautifully run down to a carving of a true angel. Lost her far lass in strangeness tears filing out the small girl unbearable, uncontrolled, unreacting pain striking stroked in her eyes unwilling to untouch the craving she could not realise trying hard midst clouds of crimson scars gaping into the white of snow forgetting what was once sung verses struck as cold gushing air blinkin her eyes late to black the shadows looming unseen in dark said she "I know now where its lost!" in truce holding loneliness ... A friend she lost !
so pls tell me how it is? comment pls
I like the imagery and metaphors, but I'm not sure I grasp the meaning; could you enlighten me?
hi there, thanks for going through it. Well, i wrote this poem when people fooled me to be my friends and actually werent and turned it all down at the right time time. i wrote the way i felt as a frozen with no change , no feelings and simply nothing which is what is in the 1st paragraph. And while i was in pain wanted nothing but just my one and only old friend back i imagined in the poem a part of my self lost comes to help me to revive and thus i regain my lost friend -"Lonliness".
Hi everybody, I'm new here. should I post my poem or just vote for other poems?
Hey, new to the group can you guys tell me what you think about this part of a poem of mine? Darkness clouds the morn. The fear of death, and shadowy ends, destroy ventures to knowledge. let me know what you think!!
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I am so sorry I stopped replying in this group so many years ago. I would like to get this group up and running again. For starters, you may post any poetry you want in here, not only vote and comment. All criticism should be constructive, but is welcome. I do encourage readers to check out samdg's link above. If you have questions about this group, let me know.
Hi everyone. My poems may be just good to me,but it seem I write better when I am feeling down and out
