Memoirs... Can I still write Of stolen veteran tales And imaginations which no one hails, Bringin down the auto-acclaimed height? Can I stil write Of stiff battles won Of medals of honor worn- A reward of grace and might? Can I still write Of a queen's heart lost And sorrow never forgot: Tears streaming all night? Can I still write Of goodly pen messengers Keeping the woods like noble rangers With all strength and delight? Can I still write Of I, an emissary of the pen Losing all to shadows in the den Bringing down the already attained height?
I know this is a whole year late, but I would like to give you my feedback on your poem. Please feel free to contact me if you have any questions. I like how you have the repetition, it adds structure and an helps with the rhythm of the poem. The third and fifth stanzas are my favorites. I see a running theme but I start loosing the connections between the stanzas at the end. I don't know whether it is me or the intent of the poem, but there is an element of vagueness (if that is even a word). Sometimes this is intended to allow the reader to connect in their own perspective, but I am unsure if that was yours. Overall, a very nice poem that leaves the reader thinking (the best kind). Thank you for sharing.
Nice poem. There are a few spelling mistakes, however. Here is a corrected version: Memoirs... Can I still write Of stolen veteran tales And imaginations that no one hails, Bringing down the auto-acclaimed height? Can I still write Of stiff battles won Of medals of honor worn- A reward of grace and might? Can I still write Of a queen's heart lost And sorrow never forgot: Tears streaming all night? Can I still write Of goodly pen messengers Keeping the woods like noble rangers With all strength and delight? Can I still write Of I, an emissary of the pen Losing all to shadows in the den Bringing down the already attained height?